The man's freedom was always a cause worth fighting for. Even in the smallest communities like the family, young members seek one day their freedom. The right timing for this action is a matter of controversy.
... awesome start :) ... very nice!
Are young adults able to jugde when this time comes?Can young adults judge the right time for them to be independent?
Are the parents able to leave their strong sentiments behind and let go youngsters so as to make their own beginning and set sails for their own life?
... I'm favoring the word "Can" to "are" :D
Very impressive introduction. However, I wish you express your view on this in the intro itself. Then your examiner would be navigated in your desired direction :)
role of a moderator and
... the right word is "guide"
Your writing skills are excellent. However, you should pay attention to the desired structure for this task. Your body paras should include specific examples for your reasoning.