The inventions gifted by the glory of science and technology in the human civilization has only brought fruitful consequences to us. Moreover, the electronic means of communication, like the T.V.-acronym for television, has accelerated the pace of revolution promoting delightful lifestyle and instant communication. This revolution has led to the formation of dichotomy of the population into two distinct groups with dissimilar enthusiasm regarding television viewing experience. In my opinion, the television has only contributed in a positive manner towards human society for several authentic reasons.
First, human life would be gloomy without the modern electronic resources like television. If the houses of the people all over the globe were to be surveyed, then they all would have a single piece of equipment in common hanging on the walls or resting on the tables, delivering daily doses of joyous programs, that is undoubtedly, a television.
Second, television has become a prominent source of knowledge and information, which keeps people "au courant". From the nursery rhymes to the Beethoven's symphonies, television is a storehouse for all those entertaining commodities, however, it has also been efficient in teaching people significant skills for survival and providing knowledge for enlightenment via it's wide ranges of programs and shows under the authority of Cable television network, entitled for the distribution of multimedia items all around the globe. Furthermore, the broadcasting of the breaking news concerning several critical global affairs and happenings proves to be very resourceful for the working class population.
Third, the integration of the television with the Internet technology has resulted even more fascinating tech-medley. People can shop any purchasable goods by browsing across the web-portals, and they can achieve those ordered commodities within a blink of an eye on their front door.
In a nutshell, although enjoying specific sophisticated facilities of television demands the installation of particular model or brand of equipment, the television has become the third eye for the human beings, abridging each and every nook and corners of the world to the people's living room. Therefore, it can be concluded that modern inventions like television, responsible for enriching human's hierarchy in the pyramid of intelligent beings, has very minute harmful consequences in community, in fact, the glee and enlightenment it shares is insurmountable and overwhelmingly covers up few infinitely worthless setbacks.
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Hi sus,
- Moreover, the electronic means of communication likesuch athe T.V.-acronym for television,
- In my opinion, the television has only contributed in a positive ...
- ... be gloomy without the modern electronic resources like television.
- tech-medley, web-portals (it is better if you don't abridge the words)
- ... and enlightenment it shares isare insurmountable and ...
I think you made a good essay. Hopefully it helps.
Body - First paragraph:
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Body - Second paragraph:
which keeps people "au courant". (Your French usage at the end is correct, but a little strange. The only time I use French words are when they are quite common (e.g. a la mode). I would say "which keeps people up to date.")
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Body - Third paragraph:
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Concluding paragraph:
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hi..
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-Pay attention for the meaning, it help reader easily to understand your essay.
-subject verb agreement.
hii, here is my correction for your essay.
-formation of a dichotomy ofwithin the population intopopulation
-enlightenment it shares isare insurmountable plural using are
-they can achieve thosereceive the
-the television has only contributed
perhaps, thats all. you should pay attention for a little thing in writing. keep spirit and correct me if i wrong yaaa. thankyou :)
