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It is inevitable for using alternative energy resources to replace fossil fuel exploitation

yuukinohan4 9 / 24 6  
Mar 6, 2017   #1
Alternative energy sources that use natural power of the wind, waves and sun are too expensive and complicated to replace the coal, oil, and gas that we use to power our cities and transport.

To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

wind/water/solar power instead of fossil fuels?

It is inevitable for finding alternative energy resources to replace fossil fuel usage such as wind power, wave power station, and solar power. However, some people argue that those are too costly and highly complex to afford. Privately, I agree to use non-fossil fuel even though those alternative powers are expensive, they are likely to change the needs of fuel from gas and oil to power our city and transport by eco-friendly electrical sources.

The evidence of high pricey and complexity of establishing natural powers lead to be unaffordable for many countries. Because government should find and collect particular materials to construct them, the party also should manage to generate efficient electricity that requires a great deal of effort from expertise. According to TIMES (2014), Japan is a country that has implemented solar power. It has to spend five years to construct this energy source, and it has allocated a far amount of money to run such power. Some technicians also were called on contributing this purpose. Therefore, construction of natural powers highly requires profound contribution material, time, and human endeavor.

Nevertheless, the way to diminish pollutions and drawbacks of vehicles' fumes is to apply natural power as far. Much research has conducted and some countries have run the alternative energy for city lighting and for driving cars. A 2015 The Economist magazine had published article said that one third of developing countries have applied natural resources as their electricity generator for lives. They have taken advantage of such sources and have recouped substantial amount of money by an Eco-friendly fuel. The emissions have declined threefold compared to the conventional energy usage. Hence, it drives many benefits to those countries, especially for environment condition.

To sum up, although alternative energy may expense much budget of government, the result gains sometimes fulfill the expectations either for people or for surrounding. Hence, many years later it should carry out experiment to optimize natural power using in worldwide. (371 words)
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Mar 6, 2017   #2
Nur, I believe that this essay might be able to score a 5 in an actual setting. That is even though your essay is a bit confusing to understand at times and causes the reader some stress. A repeated reading of the material somewhat clarifies the message of your paragraph. The main drawback, or problem of your essay at the moment though, relates to the information that you are providing. You need to remove your reliance on researched information for your essay. Use only commonly known information or examples from your personal experience in order to create valid discussion points. You have to remember that you are not going to be allowed to do any research when you do the actual test. Therefore, writing a practice essay that even cites sources with dates of publication is something that you will not have the opportunity to do in the testing center. The computer systems will be locked to only the local network. So practice writing essays using only available information from your life experiences and current popular knowledge. If you do not practice it that way, you may not be prepared for the actual exam setting when the time comes.
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Mar 6, 2017   #3
Hi Nur, you have shown the good method for paraphrasing the statement. However, your last sentence in the introductory paragraph confused readers. I did not find your reason why you place that sentence. I think that seemed like the redundant sentence. Please, you pay attention to sentences which you deliver to describe what you mind.

Turning to the body paragraph, you successfully answer the task response in the first body. However, you have fallen into a different topic in the next paragraph. You experienced the way to reduce the pollution in the first sentence. Actually, you had guided readers to understanding this well, but you elucidated the topic inappropriately. You have to focus on edges of the prompts given to obtain the high score. Severely, the whole second body exactly concentrated on the solution for diminishing the pollution.

I am supposed to admit that your vocabulary is good. It indicates you can the high score in the indicator "the lexical resource". However, keep in your mind that the paramount thing is to deal with the task responses.

Hopefully, you are able to aware of your topic so that you do not lose the score. Practice more and more Miss...

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