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Information of Bulgarian people who remain in country after graduation for continuing their studies


SarlindaDS_27 42 / 52 5  
Oct 31, 2016   #1
Writing Task I ( October 31, 2016)

The chart provides information of Bulgarian people who stay in overseas after graduated for continuing their studies in 2002, 2006 and 2008. Levels of study program consist of elementary school or lower education, junior high school and senior high school degree. Overall, the Bulgarian students who had graduated from junior high school are the highest number of students who planning study abroad than other graduates degree during those time. Then, the people who graduated from primary school or lower education degree showed upward trends over those periods.

Based on the chart data, it can be seen that the students of secondary education had been steadily on the top levels by average data above fifty percent even though actually had shown downward trends started 2002, 2006 and then to 2008 by 6 % lesser than in 2002. On the other hand, elementary school levels had dramatically increased started at 2002 by 18 % to 32 % in 2008. Then, the people who graduated from senior high school education had fluctuated trends which had increased in 2002 until 2006 by 3 % and then had suddenly fallen to 9 % in 2008.

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ibe13 36 / 50 9  
Oct 31, 2016   #2
Aloha Sarlinda, I appreciate your essay. However, there are some thoughts I will share with you particularly understanding the question.

... people who stay in overseas after graduated for continuing their studies in 2002, 2006 and 2008.

this sentence is unsuccessful to paraphrase the question. Thus, you'd better pay more attention the question before starting to write your essay. Here is my sample paraphrasing;The bar chart gives information about the percentage of Bulgarian who prefer migrating to another country in the three selected periods (2002, 2006, and 2008) according to their education level.

Levels of study program consist of elementary school or lower education, ...

I think this sentence is not needed in your essay

Overall, the Bulgarian students who had graduated from junior high schoolpeople with secondary education are the highest number percentage of students whopeople planning study abroad than other graduates degreeto live abroad during those time. ThenAlso , the people who graduated...

in this question, it can be seen that the subjects who want to live abroad are people according to education level not students who are graduated
Mathew88 3 / 4  
Oct 31, 2016   #3
Hello sarlindaDS_27
I have a twice advice to you, hope it can help you

elementary school or lower education primary school
....It is unequal betwen elementary school and lower education because there is a lower level of education than elementary school. it is kindergarden

.....there is just only one body in your essay. i suggest you to use two body


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