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Integration problems for people living abroad
The chart gives us information about integration problems for people moving to other countries.
The biggest problem of people aged 35 to 54 is sorting out finances which experienced by 35 percent in this group. Besides, the 18-34 age takes just less one percent than the 35-54 age. The proportion of people aged over 55 who have financial problems is 29 percent.
Next to reducing healthcare, it's a significant number for the 35-54 age with the highest percentage in comparison with other ages (37% in group). This problem takes account for 32 percent for the youngest group and 36 percent for the oldest group.
Contrary to the problems above, finding a place for their children to learn and be took care is not a major problem. Only 2 percent of people in the oldest group and 6 percent of the youngest group have difficulty. However, people aged 35-54 still suffer difficulties from seeking schools for their children, which takes 19 percent.
In general, all age groups experience the same problems but specially, the proportion of sorting out healthcare is a major part and finding schools for their children is a minor part in all age groups.
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