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Writing task 2: Should information about scientific research business and academic world be shared?


Nguyettrang 1 / -  
Oct 12, 2022   #1
Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world.
Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.



Sharing information helps people gain more understanding in a variety of fields such as business, science and academic world, but not all the information is freely shared because of its importance and value. There are many people agree with one of two views, but pesonally I think both views are partly.

It is understandable why some people think that a wide range of information should be shared widely about different areas of life. First, people could know more about academic world, pros and cons of scientific development to the environment and business investment for investors, so that people could apply their knowledge about those fields to protect our environment and get the most profit for themselves. However, some details such as how to make coca cola, or some crazy discoveries of people in process of scientific research and the academic world are too important and valuable. If that ìnormation is not kept confidentai, people will become confused and the world will be in chaos, so some people believe that those details could not shared freely with the others who do not work or analysis about those areas.

In my opinion, I think information about scientific research business and academic world should be shared with people in a selective way. The details shared need to be interesting, new and easy to understand, without confusing the recipients. Besides, valuable and important information for an individual or organization conducting in-depth research in various fields should be kept confidential to prevent others from stealing ideas and achievements of those individuals and organizations, also avoid bewilderment for those who have no expertise in these areas.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4772  
Oct 13, 2022   #2
The prompt restatement will receive a failing preliminary score because of 2 reasons:
1. It does not clearly and individually restate the 2 given public opinions;
2. The writer's opinion is an incomplete presentation. Partly what?

Based on these 2 errors, the writer cannot receive a passing mark for the paragraph due to the confusing sentence structure and information presentation. It will also receive a failing preliminary GRA score due to the confusion reading the paragraph will cause the examiner. At this point, the exam taker no longer has a chance of passing the test due to the additional score deductions that will be applied per section for each paragraph he has written.

Actually, the essay will receive an automatic failing score due to the improper formatting present. There is no concluding paragraph in the last part of the essay so the summary conclusion is missing. It is also just a 3 paragraph essay when the requirement for this prompt is a 4-5 paragraph discussion. I am afraid the writer does not understand how to properly format a Task 2 essay and how to write the paragraphs based on the writing instructions. That is why this essay failed.

He can easily learn how to write these essays by reading the sample essays as this forum. He can familiarize himself with the writing requirements and learn from the mistakes made by others and the corrections provided to them. After he learns more about how to approach the writing test, he can try to write another practice essay for review in this forum.


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