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Instrument that we always hear everyday and everytime is the human voice


Fira28 6 / 10  
Sep 19, 2016   #1
How to speak so that people want to listen

Instrument that we always hear everyday and everytime is the voice of humans. But a lot of the situations where the time to talk others do not listen. There are seven factors in speaking and this should be left. The first factor is gossip, the second is judging, the third is negativity, the fourth is complaining, the fifth is excuss, the second least is lying, as well as the least is dogmatism. On the other side, there are four positive thing for the foundation when people speak. Usually can reduce with HAIL.

H is honesty => by clear and straight.
A is authenticity => be yourself.
I is integrity => be your word.
L is love => wish them well.

There are tools that can increase the ability to speak consist of register is know about voice that be used, timbre is know voice that sounds like, ritme, speed of sound, inflection, volume of voice.

rizaldohabibie 19 / 35  
Sep 19, 2016   #2
hi..
It is a good essay of yours.
I have some suggestion..

But[However,] a lot of the situations where the time to talk [to] others do not listen[is not listened] .
>> It will be more formal when you do not use 'but' as the firts sentence opener. You can use however, nevertheless, etc
>> be aware of passive voice

thanks..
I hope it helps..
Jawa 11 / 17 1  
Sep 19, 2016   #3
hii.. Fira28
let me give you some suggestion

On the other side, there are four positive thing(s) for the foundation ...

you should pay more attention between modifier and head in a noun phrase, if a modifier describes a plural, the head should also be in a plural.

..., speed of sound, inflection, and volume of voice

it is better for you to make and in your last examples

hope this helps,
thanks


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