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Is international sports event suitable for a country or not? Discuss both views


chienng 1 / -  
Oct 17, 2022   #1
(IELTS WRITING TASK 2)

Some people think that an international sports event is suitable for a country, while some people think it is bad.

Discuss both views and state your opinion.



My essay:

Numerous citizens believe that conducting international sporting events can bring many benefits to their own nation, whereas others think the opposite way. In my opinion, it is reasonable for those who side with the latter idea, but I totally agree with the former one because there are advantages for aspects including tourism, people in the local area could be earned from the event.

On the one hand, an international event needs a huge amount of money to organize. It means that the government has to rely on resources such as the national budget which is mostly collected through taxes. As a result, many people might think it would be more efficient to focus on education as well as the public transport or sewage system. For example, the Sea games, which were hosted by VietNam the last year, cost over 500 billion VND, while in every rainy season, lots of cities in VietNam are flooded. Furthermore, many indoor sporting areas built for the event might be left unused because the next Sea games will be hosted by another country.

On the other hand, on a global stage, an international event is a great opportunity for a nation to promote its culture, tourism, and so on. This is due to the fact that athletes and interviewers from various countries will be invited and join the event. From this, they will advertise and introduce what they are interested in. Besides, businesses of local citizens living around areas for the event could also boost their revenue as there are more tourists or travelers who want to behold how athletes compete in the stadium.

In conclusion, international sports events could consume a lot of money, however, it could be compensated by other values such as national finance and the image of the country.
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Oct 17, 2022   #2
This type of prompt asks the writer to consider 3 things:
- Why does the public support the opinion? (Supporting explanation)
- What does he think about the public opinion (personal opinion: Support or non-support)
- Why does he see the public opinion that way? (Explanation)

Based on the current writing, I cannot say that the writer actually considered the public vs, his personal opinion. That is because there is a lack of proper 3rd and 1st person pronoun usage in the essay. There needs to be a demarcation between opinions in each paragraph through pronoun usage otherwise, the general opinion presentation could be considered only of the writer's personal point of view. Keep in mind that this is a comparative essay of the public v, personal kind and such, must be reflected that was in each paragraph.

The reasoning provided is sound and acceptable but, unclear with regards to who is actually thinking and presenting these opinions. Each paragraph needs to represent 2 opinions as previously described.
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Oct 18, 2022   #3
Here is my advice: this a discuss both views and state your opinion essay so you should discuss both points of view impartially before giving your own view.


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