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International students in the UK attending and achieving second or even higher class degrees


tintiah 1 / 1  
Sep 14, 2021   #1

the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK University



At a university in the uk, there are not only uk but also many international students attending and achieving second or even better class degrees. The bar chart clearly illustrates the percentage of the two groups of students.

In some society-related subjects, there is obviously more uk students who take and get a higher education. In art history and sociology, the home students dominate with 5-10 percentage higher in comparision. In internation law and english literature, there is a much bigger gap. Whereas, the foreign students only make up around 50 percent, the local students account for up to 20 percent higher.

The international students, however, also express their strengths at two subjects: electrical engineering and information technology. Espeacially, in it, there is only around three out of five home students compared to the 85 percent of the oversea ones.

Moreover, there is also a equal percenage of the two sections of students continuing and gaining better degrees in nursing( over three quarters) and accountancy( exactly sixty percent).

Overall, the column graph demonstrates the percentage of two kinds of students following higher education as well as gives us the perception that any of the two have their own strengths and weaknesses denoted in certain subjects.



Holt  Educational Consultant - / 11,584 3758  
Sep 15, 2021   #2
uk

Word capitalization warning. The UK is the name of a country in Europe, The United Kingdom. It is a proper noun and should be written as such.

second or even better class degrees

No change to the original keyword reference. This is a TA and LR problem. It shows a lack of English vocabulary in reference to synonym knowledge. Replace all of the keywords in the restatement.

two groups of students.

Where is the trending statement? If need not be a paragraph. A single sentence at the end of the summary overview is more than acceptable.

This is a task 1 essay. A concluding paragraph that restates the summary is out of place. It is not necessary in this type of report presentation.
isamj 2 / 5  
Sep 16, 2021   #3
@tintiah
Hello, this is good written but I think you should elaborate more on the conclusion, stating your conclusion and opinion at the concluding paragraph.

I would appreciate your feedback in my writings !! thank you.
PaulBrutix - / 1  
Sep 17, 2021   #4
First of all, I would like to understand where this note was written. This is definitely not an article, essay, or a thesis. It looks like part of something. And as already indicated in the answers above - decide on the purpose of this work and build a clear structure: the problem (introduction), the solution to the problem, the conclusions. The year 2009 is indicated on the graph - is this an error or was this year analyzed? Then here you should indicate why this particular year or give a comparison with the current one.

And for last: "gives us the perception that any of the two have their own strengths and weaknesses denoted in certain subjects." I am personally very interested in what strengths and weaknesses denoted in certain subjects.

P.s. if I have a dead end in the formation of the structure of the article, I do not hesitate to use external resources such as proofreading-editing/#proofreading-editing.

Moderator, I have not seen a ban on the publication of links, if that.


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