Using internet became an indispensable part of life for many people. However some people think that it has a lots of drawbacks. Before drawing a reasoned conclusion let us first discuss both sides of view.
To be frank, your introduction is just boring. No interesting ideas or sentences which might draw interest. Just some well-known, obvious facts. You should link your sentences together less abruptly. Your thoughts must flow nicely.
First of all theInternet noticeably facilitates our lifes.
If I were you I would put 'noticeably' at the end.
For example if in the olden days people payed money for telephone calls, or wrote by hand letters and sent them per post, now we can send e-mail and make internet calls.
For example, if some twenty years ago people could only pay taxes by cash, write letters by hand and then send them through the post office, now we can send letters and make calls via Intenet.