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IELTS; INTERNET BRINGS THE WORLD TOGETHER AND MAKE IT SMALLER


manson20 1 / -  
Jan 29, 2013   #1
(Ielts essay task 2)
Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

Internet have become part of our daily life. It existed everywhere; office, home and even your cell phone. We cannot avoid it in our daily life. Student needs to search information online. Office clerk needs Internet to check and send email.

Unlike the telecommunication, Internet is not own by any government nor any enterprise. People do not need to paid any fee for using Internet, except the connection service charge. Once you are connected, there a lot of free resources/applications are available on Internet. One of the main reason that people use Internet is for communication. People do not need to paid extra fee for communicate to other on Internet and there are a lot of different communication method available. Internet change the way how people to communicate with one another and it make the world became smaller.

In the past, people write a letter and go to the post office to mail it. But now, we can sitting at home and power on the computer with a few click, the email will be sent to your friend immediately. We can use our smartphone with the application like WhatsApp, with just one click, a message can be send to a group of friend anytime anywhere. Communication become one to many and not necessary to be face to face.

Some people may argue that the change would make the face to face communication skill of teenager become worse. However, we have to accept it. I agree that Internet making communication easier than before. The world is changing, technology making the change much more faster. We do not know what will happen in the future, but we have to adapt it.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 29, 2013   #2
Internet haveThe internet has become part of our daily life.

... good opening.... pay attention to the grammar correction I made there.

It existedexists everywhere; office, home and even your cell phone.

... you have to keep this sentence in present tense.

We cannot avoid it in our daily life. Student needs to search information online. Office clerk needs Internet to check and send email.

... These lines do not provide any meaningful ideas to back your topic; instead they sound like you are going off track and repeating the same thing. Tell something that would set up a link with your topic;

The internet connects the entire globe instantly by fascilitating speedy access to information and people irrespective of any geographical or time barriers.
somysojan 8 / 19 8  
Jan 30, 2013   #3
The Internet havehas becomea big part of our daily life. It existedexists everywhere; office, home and even your cell phoneon cell phones . We cannot avoid it in our daily lifeSo I fully agree to the point that the internet has got an inevitable role in peoples daily life ,especially in communication . Student needs to search information online. Office clerk needs Internet to check and send email.


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