TOEFL; The internet provides a lot of valuable information. However,others disagree

Some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

In the modern society, internet is considered as one of the most important inventions over the past century. Some people believe that several problems occur from an information on the internet. However, some say that the internet provides a lot of valuable information. In my opinion, I agree with the latter because the internet gives daily necessary information, people can gain knowledge and they can explore the world.

First of all, everybody would like to know what is going on around the world in their everyday lives. Sometimes, they want an information that can help them in daily life which the internet can provide all of these to people. For example, a businessman who has no time to watch a television or read a newspaper can receive news and check stock markets easily via the internet.

In addition, people can gain more knowledge by using the internet, the most useful technology in the world. Many people such as students can take online courses to study at home or they can watch beneficial videos which also teach them knowledge. Not only students but also everyone could get more information and knowledge. For instance, people who have problems with their health can search for more information about it.

Last but not least, The internet makes the world becomes smaller which is a good thing. This is because people who have no time or have financial problems could travel around the world by using the internet. They can see lots of picture and videos of many interesting places. Moreover, people can learn other countries's culture and tradition which makes them have more knowledge about that nations.

To conclude, people are satisfied with the internet and sometimes even thanks it because it helps us in studying, doing business and exploring the world. With valuable information it provides, people can enjoy their lives much more

Some people believe that several problems occur from anthe information published on the internet.
[quote=pppanta In my opinion, I agree with the latter because the internet givesprovidesdaily necessary information daily, people can gain knowledge and they can explore the world. [/quote].... Well....as an idea wise, I am not in favor of this sentence. I think it lacks logical reasoning.

However, you follow the right structure for the introduction. For last sentence in the intro, I suggest the following;
In my opinion, I believe that the Internet provides valuable information to people that enable them to stay well informed.

The word 'Information' is both singular and plural. It is most commonly used in it's plural form. So you cannot have "an" in front of information. Also, the latter part of this sentence sounds pretty confusing. This sentence should be read as;

Sometimes they want information that can help them in their daily life for which the Internet is the best solution.

Thank you so much guys!!!

... the latter part does not make much sense.


this is a good example. Very good!


... this again, goes out of your flow. Expand on the above example and that's enough for this paragraph.


This is because, the Internet eliminates geographical and time barriers by allowing people to interact with each other more efficiently and conveniently.