I am having trouble continuing with the essay because of the thesis. It's hard to write about something that I am still not sure of.
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Why dos the thesis assertion make it difficult? When Babe Ruth would point in the direction of the home run he was going to hit, that made it more difficult for him. If you begin with a thesis, it makes it tough to proceed... but if you allow the thesis to change to accommodate the paragraphs you come up with, it will be easy.
Write a sentence about an observation you make, and let it be the topic sentence (first sentence of a paragraph. Follow it up with an example and some explanation, and then a conclusion sentence for the paragraph. Do this a few times, and you have your body paragraphs.
Look at all the body paragraphs and rewrite the thesis statement so that it fits them perfectly.
OR just write these paragraphs in ways that support your assertion that a good family = a good future. ... yes! This is what you should do, because you wrote this intro beautifully.
...it is a wonder that
anyone can laugh, fall in love, and live life to its fullest.
Put this little extra phrase between 2 commas:
It seems as though, at every turn,
there is an obstacle after another.
The rest o this is beautifully written. Just find examples from the story to support the assertion. start each with a topic sentence
to begin the paragraph.