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GRE - ISSUE ESSAY; Do we need ceremonies & rituals to define ourselves?


ptejas40 1 / 3 2  
Jul 9, 2013   #1
IF RITUALS DID NOT EXIST,WE WOULD HAVE TO INVENT THEM.WE NEED CEREMONIES & RITUALS TO HELP US DEFINE OURSELVES SOCIALLY & CULTURALLY.

Rituals & ceremonies play a great role in every culture. They are the ingredients of their culture & heritage. For every ceremony or rituals there is a specific & logical reason.Yes we need rituals & ceremonies to help us to define ourselves socially & culturally.

For example, in India dasara is celebrated with a lot of joy &happiness. It is celebrated so as to celebrate victory of good over evil. On the same day the ravana was killed. This is part of our culture.By celebrating it we are defining it socially & culturally. By this people are knowing the reason

To give more light on this point consider the example of Ganesh Chaturthi. The reason why Lokmanya Tilak started this is to gather more & more people together. Different people try to understand their problems, to create the unity in between the Indian society.ie to achieve unity in diversity.The result is that these ceremonies helped a lot for achieving the freedom of india.

As everybody knows india is a country with diversity with respect to language,food,cloths etc.Each state is having their own way of celebrating. They have different culture. Thus to define themselves ceremonies & rituals are the best option. This will not only define themselves socially & culturally but also create unity in diversity.

To conclude,If this rituals did not exixt,we would have invented them . And Rituals & ceremonies are defining ourselves socially & culturally.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 9, 2013   #2
They are the ingredients of their culture & heritage

... whose culture? Nothing said before this refer to "their"

For every ceremony or ritualsritual

For every ceremony or rituals there is a specific & logical reason

Behind every ceremony or ritual, there is a specific and logical reasoning.

Yes we need rituals & ceremonies to help us to define ourselves socially & culturally.

. On the same day the ravana was killed.

.... your examiner may not know who ravana is... you better describe him.

By celebrating it we are defining it socially & culturally.

.... well.... this conclusion lacks logical reasoning. You just make this statement without giving convincing arguments for the reader to believe what you say.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jul 9, 2013   #3
Hi ptejas40,
I think you need to improve a lot for this task. This task is meant to assess your ability to think critically about an issue of general interest and present your views about it clearly in writing. So you've got to display this skill if you aim for a good score. Visit the following site for more help;

ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/issue

Also, this scoring guide would be helpful for you as to understand how you would be evaluated at the exam;
ets.org/gre/revised_general/prepare/analytical_writing/issue/ scoring_guide
OP ptejas40 1 / 3 2  
Jul 9, 2013   #4
Thanks for your valuable inputs..


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