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[GRE Issue essay] Corporations have responsibility to promote well-being of societies

testtaker 6 / 20 4  
Aug 23, 2013   #1
I am very unhappy with what I did in writing this essay. First, I exceeded the 30-minute time limit, and second, I feel like I didn't properly address the prompt. The essay deviates from what the prompt states/expects and I was totally unaware of what I was doing during writing. Could you people please give your opinions?

The prompt:

Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the wellbeing
of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that
the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to
make as much money as possible.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your
own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing
and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

My response:

Every living being has a responsibility to the place it belongs - to other living and non-living it is a part of - for it's own sake. It might be expressed as a simple calculation. If you do good to others, you will receive good from them in return. Doing good to others can be viewed from three perspectives. First, promoting good to others can be inspired by a crafty plan to obtain even better things from the people in return, or it can be merely the philanthropy, or it can come from a sense of responsibility to the small world around one is living. In any way, doing good to others will certainly bring benefits to the do-gooders. The corporations, we can see around us operating in numerous sectors, are obviously a part of society and environment as they are operating within it. No doubt, the same calculation of doing good is also applicable to them. Whether they want to make money only or are concerned with the well-being of people the and surroundings they are interacting with, it is the sense of responsibility of promoting well-being of the society and environment that can bring well-being to both the society and themselves. Therefore, I strongly advocate for the sense responsibility of doing good to others in which corporations operate.

For many corporations, acquiring better acceptance among the people they are operating is crucial to achieve success, and sometimes to exist. The best way to earn acceptance is to promote well-being of the people they are operating in and the environment the people are living in. It gives a sense to the people that the particular corporation which is concerned for their well being are better to do business with. For example, British American Tobacco (BAT) launched a tree plantation program in a particular area of a subcontinental country. The people in that region took part in that program very enthusiastically. As a result, for a long time, the people in that area were satisfied with BAT and the local newspapers published articles praising the company. BAT certainly got well acceptance among the people in that region through this program.

Doing good also brings good name. BRAC, a well-known corporation in many countries, have taken a lot of attempts to benefit people in many ways. For example, it has invested a lot of money to invent a cheap and easy to use brail system. They have also been trying to introduce cheap nutritous foods for poor people. Certainly, they are trying to promote well-being of people in society. Now a day, almost everyone in a country BRAC operates in are in favor of using products of BRAC. Promoting well-being did not harm the money making of BRAC.

Above all, the corporations are part of society. They are making money from the people of society they belong to. They are making money while they are affecting the environment in many ways such as polluting it by noxious gas and other waste materials. As a conscientious being, they should compensate the things they are affecting in some way. Moreover, this act of compensating won't harm their money making.

While some people believe that corporations should be concerned with money-making only they forget that money-making can be done better by being aware of the responsibility of promoting well-being to society and environment. Having a good reputation in a society serves better in money-making, and it can bring a good future to the society as well. Considering all these concerns, no one should deny that corporations have a responsibility to promote well-being of societies and environments they are operating in.

nlakhots 5 / 9  
Aug 23, 2013   #2
nvr counted...but i guess it more than 300 words. Definitly will take more than 30 minutes...!!
OP testtaker 6 / 20 4  
Aug 24, 2013   #3
Yes! I should restrain myself from trying to write too much on a single point.

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