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Essay about issue of the crime punishment - evaluation of the guilt

Aris05 31 / 24 1  
Oct 7, 2016   #1
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and motivation for committing it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The large number of inhabitants agree that every type of crime has to get punishment directly, while others believe that the criminal sentence must consider the other factors influencing the crime. This essay will discuss both views.

Nowadays, the amount of crime has increased and thus most people are not able to live in peaceful situation. Consequently, most of them convince that the government must punish people committing in criminal activity. For instance, a person robbing a house and killing the owner of the house should get a severe sentence such as prison sentence along the life or death punishment. The simple reason is to emerge the wary effect to other criminals. As the result, most of them think that it is able to have immense possibility to reduce the crime amount and to provide peace life for the society.

On the other hand, many believe that the sentence is able to be given after the authority has done the deep investigation to know the other factors influencing people to commit the crime. For example, pick pockets are able to get amnesty when they have a strong reason why they are involved in the stealing activity such us to maintain their life as they live in poor condition or someone has forced them to do it. It pertains to human right as well since every person has the same right to get protection in front of the law.

All in all, several people state that the punishment has to be given as soon as possible, while many think that the sentence must wait until the account of crime has been met. However, I personally believe that the criminals are supposed to get sentence as soon as possible because it is able to maintain a good situation in society. It is imperative that the government has to arrange the policy to regulate this case wisely.
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Oct 8, 2016   #2
overall, it is evidence that you already have a good pattern on composing essay while write your sentences with less minor errors. However, your whole essay do not really meet the prompt. It slightly out of topic in the way you delivering the first view. it should be about fixed/arranged punishment. for example, those who commit murder need to be given death penalty without any concern about their criminal motives, even if it just a self-defense effort. Thus, you need to revise your first body paragraph, introduction, and conclusion

THUS, I only give some suggestions on your second body paragraph

... many believe that the sentence is able to SHOULD be given (...) has done the A/CERTAIN deep investigation to knowPROBE/FIND OUT etc the other factors ...

For example, pickpockets [no space] are able to SHOULD[Concern about the meaning of modal form you need to use with regard to its meaning. on this case, it is not about 'ability' so you should not use 'able'. Indeed, you need to use 'should' cause it is about something that suppose to do] get amnesty when they (...) are involved in the

... well since every personS has the same right to get ...


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