Task 1 IELTS; The Number of People who travelled abroad
The table gives the information about the number of people in three different countries who visited abroad during a decade, started 1985 to 1995, it calculated by million. Overall, at the first glance, it is evident that the most dramatic increase occurred for Japanese people. In contrast, Canadian experienced a slight decrease, while the figure for Australian remained stable.
Regarding the table, even though Japanese people had the smallest proportion to travel abroad, by 4.9 million in 1985, a dramatic increase occurred after a decade about three-fold in 1995. This phenomenon was contrasted when it was for Canadian tourists which as the second highest proportion in 1985, it experienced slight decrease precisely 5 million in the following given year, from 6 to 5.5 million.
In addition, for the purpose of Australian people who spent their time to travel abroad, they broke the record of the highest one. Yet, its trend showed stable which increased very slightly, from 7.1 to 7.2 million between 1985 and 1995 respectively.
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