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Judging book by its cover - reliable opinion or not?


dinhnguyen 1 / -  
Apr 9, 2018   #1
A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values , such as honour,kindness,trust,no longer seem important .

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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What makes a person worthy?



The saying , "don't judge a book by its cover" , is so true . A person's worth shows through not only physical appearance or social status or material possessions , but also characteristics . Therefore I strongly disagree with statement that honour,kindness,trust become old-fashioned .

It is pointless that a high - ranked , rich person is dishonest and untrustworthy . There are many cases in which a man , who has fashionable outfit , tempting young girls . He promises to give them well-paid jobs by working overseas . Actually they are going to be sold to become prostitutes or slaves . There are also some people in government , who have a high social status and are very rich , still cheating money from national revenue .They report wrongly in purpose to put this money into their own pockets .

On the other hand , many people , who don't have much money , are though honest and reliable. Although many young couples don't have big houses or modern cars at all , their homes are always full of happiness and laughs . There are also some national leaders , who still wear simply when they meet their citizens . They still show the kindness and friendliness despite of their supreme status .

To sum up , possessing a huge property and getting the highest position are wishes of everyone . These show up you have a successful career . However the most valuable things are family , friend and the inside beauty .
Umni 1 / 1  
Apr 13, 2018   #2
after finishing your essay, i woud say that yo have to be careful on punctuation use. many people , who don't have much money ,, Therefore (,) I strongly..... disagree. in my view, you need to explain more on the reasons of each.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4772  
Apr 13, 2018   #3
Nyuyen, you will not score very well in the TA section of the scoring because you did not properly paraphrase the opining statement in the first paragraph. Perhaps you are not familiar with the IELTS Task 2 rules. The first paragraph, under this rule, is always used to provide an insight into your English comprehension skills. That is why you are asked to merely restate the prompt at this point and provide an explanation of what the discussion instruction is. The direct question response, as you did in this essay is meant for a different kind of IELTS essay test. The opening paraphrase for this essay should be similar to this:

It is believed that modern times have changed the way people judge the value of people. Whereas before, a person's worth was measured by his honesty and integrity, these days it appears that material wealth is the predominant judging criteria for the value of a person. I strongly disagree with this statement for a number of reasons.

You also need to make sure that all of your sentences deliver a clear statement. In this instance,

It is pointless that a high - ranked , rich person is dishonest and untrustworthy .

does not make sense. The sentence does not have a point. There is a subject but no verb. What exactly do you mean? The sentence leaves the reader confused and stressed out when you make incomplete statements. This happens often throughout your essay. Try to make sure that you do not translate from your mother tongue to English. That is where the confusing sentence development arises. You need to practice thinking in English aside from writing in English so that your sentences make sense every time.


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