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Kashmir attack: India 'launches strikes against militants' (Summary of BBC News)


Afdhel 14 / 21 1  
Sep 29, 2016   #1
The conflict between the Kashmiris and the Indian military has been a long conflict in South Asia. Base on the prediction, The war have been killing thousands of people since some decades. This conflict also created tension between Pakistan government and India.

Based on the BBC news on 29 September, the Indian Army has launched an operation to arrest militants-expected along the border with Pakistan in Kashmir. Invasion of India has been criticized by Pakistan.

Pakistan has confirmed that two of its soldiers had been killed in an exchange of fire along the Line of Control that divides the disputed region. Pakistan considers aggression of India along the border as a provocation. But India claims its operations only to hunt terrorists.

Prime Minister Nawaz Sharif, criticized the Indian army's aggression. He admitted that the Pakistan military is able to prevent any evil design to undermine the sovereignty of Pakistan.

Source: bbc
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Sep 29, 2016   #2
Hi Nousha, as I go through your essay, I must say, there is really a thin line between summarizing something that one understands and summarizing something that you are interested and if both catches your essay, then you can get assured that it is a good one.

I tell you this because, this is how I see the essay, it is well managed and all the necessary details of the news, specially the critical information are depicted in the essay and this means, understanding the story is a great factor and it will help a lot in writing and re-telling the story so people can understand it the way a regular reader can.

Overall, it is an insightful summary, you captured the right amount of information needed to suffice the reader to comprehend and get the message from a much complicated news. Just to share, indeed, we live in a world where, we don't really know when or where we are safe anymore, however, there is always one thing we can do, to be vigilant and be observant to the people and the environment we belong in order to avoid falling victims of such events.


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