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Keeping children for better education - TEDTALK


NinaJoesuf25 4  
Nov 13, 2016   #1
Kandice Sumner, a tactful lady, paid attention to people who was unfortunate to obtain a high-quality school. She is a daughter of an officer of state (her father) and an educator (her mother). However, the principle of her family was that wealth was not the majority goals for future. She struggled to broaden her knowledge in days gone by since she had to take an hour from her home to get better education. In retrospect, she thought that it was a common activity that everyone wakes up at 5 o'clock and go to school afterwards. As she got older, she realized that there was any considerable disparity among people and not everyone had opportunities to get a school. There was by far about discriminating issue such as color skin or income. She felt that she should take responsible for this situation. For many years, she strove for cultivating books in a treasure trove of literature. At the end, she strongly emphasized that people should donate their money, resources or time to help them to get better future.
sinahector  
Nov 13, 2016   #2
Hi
.....wealth was not the majority goals for the future
She struggled to broaden her knowledge, for instance, she had to take an hour trip from her home to get better education
there was a considerable disparity
to get to a school
There were discriminating issues such as...
should take responsibility for this situation
to help them others or themselves to get better future.
yurikeyuri 2  
Nov 15, 2016   #3
Hello, let me give you my correction

people who waswere unfortunate because the people is plural

their money, resourcesresource or time because must be singular form

the majority of goals


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