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Keeping dogs and cats as companion. How it influences ownership and the community?


YULIS 9 / 17 1  
Sep 19, 2014   #1
In Europe, most of families have pets, such as dogs and cats. In the fact, pets can be a friendly animal to the people, but also can be dangerous to the people. In this essay, the writer will explain what is are advantages and disadvantages of having pets.

First of all, this paragraph will explain about advantages of having pets for ownership community and the animal involved. Some advantages for the animals are love, cared for, well-fed. And for community are pet owners healthier and happier, can be a service guide and guard dogs. If the people choose having pets they must give their love to the animals because when they are giving much love they will be friendly and the owner will be healthier and happier to spend time with them. In Europe, some people prefer keeping the animals if they have no couple to spend their time to live. Care for each other between pets and ownership are will be ownership will be natural feeling for them. Beside that, pets can be a service guide and guard dogs if people giving well-fed for them. Animals will give some feedback for the ownership because they also can be a kind person who saving their live.

In the other hand, having pets also give gives some disadvantages for the animals which are some examples ; lack of freedom and natural activity. People who having who have pets the fact they lack the animals fro freedom and natural habit of them if they do not care with their pets. Sometimes animals will make some problems to ownership such as make a noise which will disturb the people or belled (cats ) and muzzled (dogs). Beside that community who have pets sometimes they have some problem with themselves. For examples : not always well-treated and respected, more regulations : to protect native animal from cats to control dog, cost of abandoned pets. That of all some examples why people must to think how to handle if they are choose keeping pets.

To conclude, people who keep pets in their house should give love for them. It is because, if people choose having pets such as dogs or cats they must try to be more patient and diligent to care with them.
Kian1378 3 / 5 2  
Sep 19, 2014   #2
you repeated some words and you should use different words.
Mann_ms 9 / 20 5  
Sep 19, 2014   #3
Nice essay...
however, there are several basic that we should discuss..
I hope, we can share each other based on what we've already learned. :)

If I make mistake, My Apologies!!!

In Europe, most of families have pets, such as dogs and cats.

* Maybe, we should be careful to put "comma". If I'm not false, one of function the comma is to mark off a support unit from control unit. from your sentece, I mean that "In Europe such as dogs and cats" == but I have suggestion for you from your sentence, how about this " Most of families, in Europe, have pets such as dogs and cats"

In the fact, pets can be a friendly animal to the people, but also can be dangerous to the people

* based on my understanding, "but also"always integral to "not only"

the writer will explain what is are advantages and disadvantages of having pets.

* you have 2 to be, which one?? :)

Care for each other between pets and ownership are will be ownership will be natural feeling for them

* please try to use another words

having pets also give gives some disadvantages for the animals which are some examples

* give or gives..??

People who having who have pets the fact they lack the animals for freedom and natural habit of them if they do not care with their pets.

* I don't catch what do you mean.
Anfalia 40 / 56 23  
Sep 20, 2014   #4
In the fact, pets can be a friendly animal to the people, but also can be dangerous to the people

in the fact, pets not only can be friendly animal but also dangerous for people.

Care for each other between pets and ownership are will be ownership will be natural feeling for them.

the parallel structure between "pets and ownership"
perhaps you can change; "a sense of care will be natural feeling for both pets and ownerships"

In the other hand, having pets also give gives some disadvantages for the animals which are some examples ; lack of freedom and natural activity. People who having who have pets the fact they lack the animals fro freedom and natural habit of them if they do not care with their pets.

actually it was hard for me to understand the main point of that sentence. but I'll try to do in other sentence if I'm not mistaken.

In the other hand, having pets also gives some disadvantages for the animals; lack of freedom and natural activity. As the matter of fact, the animals which were looked after by people do not get freedom and warn of pet's natural habit if the owner do not care with them.

Beside that community who have pets sometimes they have some problem with themselves.

some problems

overall, that is good writing. I'm not an expert and sorry if i have mistakes. we can share together. :)


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