With the advance of technology, the ages of people who touch the technology become lower and lower.
the ages of those who use* technology
At the same time, almost all of the parents face the same problem.
I'm confused here. what do you mean?
First of all, it is necessary for children to gain more chances and experience. By p laying computer games.
you dont have to say you were addicted, it weakens your argument, though you make it known that such a problem exists. interesting indeed.
Moreover, to enrich children's social life, children get more opportunities to interact with their friends.
Though true, I think it's realllly better to have real friends who can do things in real life. not play games on a computer :]
One of the experiences is how to attain a goal in computer games. If parents do not allow their children playing computer game.
this is what makes this issue quite sad. if this person has no one to talk to because he doesn't play games, then good for him. he should become a genius and make it big in the world. then again, the pressure to fit in, isn't it. :/ Do you really think these games are necessary? it seems like you're saying games are needed in order to talk to people, to have
things to talk about. sorry about this secant :P
Last but not least, providing a safe environment for children, parents should enable children to play computer games.
what do you mean? I think you contradicted yourself here. many parents tend to play games, but not let their children play? that what you're trying to say? I guess.
What the parents did, what their children do.
are you going for the "what parents are able to do, children should be able to do too"? quite fun. quite fun. haha
Prohibiting children playing computer games may give them more excuses to find other occasions playing its.
how cute. make them stay at home so that they don't meet the bad boys on the street :] games are much safer, but what about their poor eyes and their poor minds? :<
For the reasons above, I disagree that playing computer games wastechildren' s time.
Comments: I'm not quite getting your flow. games allow people to experience complex thinking experiences where they need to solve problems and reach goals. then games allow people to communicate and have things to talk about. lastly, games on a computer are safer than the reality outside. Makes sense, makes SNES.e :]
Sorry for my oddball comments. I liked this topic quite a lot. Intro starts out well to lead into gaming, but the ending transition part can get some more work. the conclusion likewise. you're main point is clear, but the wording is distracting.