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What kind of sport should have well deserved place in schools curriculum?


almatina 1 / 1 1  
Feb 4, 2016   #1
Some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in the school

Almost any day of the week you can look at the newspaper read articles discussing the competitive sports, both team and individual have no place in the school curriculum. There are several controversial points of view on this issue. The first regards students who are interested in sport and do the sport. On account of this there are 2 opinions.

On the one hand, it is obvious that school do not have a such opportunity and facilities. Because in schools students study and get knowledges not do the sport. So have not place in the school curriculm. It does not matter whether you like it or not you have to recognize the fact that in schools subjects play more important role than sport. Probably nobody would argue that actually it is so.

However, this attitude may cause a lot of concerns among people who believe that competitive sports, both team and individual must have place in the school curriculum. Because, nowadays there are people who suffer from overweight. So, school should pay attention more the sport. After some students will not suffer from such problems. Actually, in students life school and sport play valuable roles. However, there are students who do the sport after school. If they have sport section in school they do not have need to go other places. It would be more comfortable for students. Also,there will be more interested on sports that they could be more take a part in competitions among schools.

I fimly believe that in the future competitive sports,both team and individual will have a place in the school curriculum.

vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Feb 5, 2016   #2
Almost any day of the week you can look at the newspaper read articles discussing the competitive sports, both team and individual have no place in the school curriculum.

- Is this a truth that you can back up with facts or are you just making this up? This is not a logical representation of the thesis prompt in your essay so you should review and revise the statement in order to become more provable and offer a better restated thesis.

Because in schools students study and get knowledges not do the sport. So have not place in the school curriculm.
- So you are saying that the subject known as Physical Education which is when sports are taught in schools should be removed due to its irrelevance? Doesn't the student learn something from PE and the sport that he plays at school? This is a flawed line of reasoning that can easily be faulted by others. Remember, you have to defend the opinions that you present in your essay. Expect the arguments and explain why the other side has the wrong perception of this discussion.

people who suffer from overweight
- How does this argument fit in with the topic of competitive sports being played or not played in school? It does not seem to have any relevance.

The main point that should be discussed in the essay pertains to whether competitive sports should be taught in school or not. The first part of your discussion applies to the prompt but the latter part does not. Therefore, your discussion is only half right and will only get a score equivalent to the correctness of your discussion. It may not be a passing grade.
ADIE08 29 / 32 1  
Feb 5, 2016   #3
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