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The kind of transport to go to work in Houston, Texas. Writing test 1 in English studio


alfinkurnia 33 / 47  
Nov 14, 2016   #1
The table shows information about kind of transport to go to work in Houston, Texas. According the table people prefer to use car than public transport. Overall, the most people who go to work use cars, and the least people choose bikes for work. In other hand, the higest average age who go to work are use trains and buses, and the smallest average age use bikes.

By comparison, cars used by workers has 48 percent but the percentage of cylist just about 4 percent. And the graph shows CO2 emisson from various transport car with driver only has aproximately 0,32 CO2 emission. In comparison, buses and trains just has 0,07 CO2 emission, but there is no emission if use bicycle. In conclusion, the highest CO2 emission is from cars with driver only, furthermore cars with 4 people are the second. But the best transport is bikes because there is no C02 emission and more healty for our environment.
yurikeyuri 43 / 61 2  
Nov 14, 2016   #2
Hello Alfin,
let me give you my correction, please

the higesthighest"you lose in h letter" average age whothat "because the noun is thing not human" go to work are use ...

buses and trains just hashave "plural form" 0,07 CO2 emission

but there isare no emission if use bicycle.

there isare no C02 emission
ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Nov 14, 2016   #3
Hi Alfin,

I am not really sure that you post this essay in a hurry or what, because I can notice many spelling errors and you also forgot to upload the picture. I suggest you to use spell-checker to help you out. This would also help us in reading and checking the detail of your essay later on. However, please take a closer look on my feedback below.

1st paragraph:
- The table shows the information about kind of transportation that is used by people to go to work ...
- According the table, (comma is necessary) people prefer ...
- Overall, it is noticeable thatthe most people who ...
- InOn the other hand, the higesthighestaverage ageage groupwho go to work areusetake trains and buses, and the smallest averagelowest age groupuseride bikes.

Your second paragraph spelling problems are:
- cylist >> cyclist
- emisson >> emission
- aproximately >> approximately
- healty >> healthy

Also, remember that in English language, you need to write 0.07 instead of 0,07.

Hope this helps :)
Abrahamlincoln 54 / 56  
Nov 15, 2016   #4
Dear Alfian
Let me give you some inputs

The table shows the information about kind of transport which is used going to workto go to work in Houston, Texas.

According the table saw that people prefer to use the car than public transport.

note: in writing task 1, your writing should consist of 3 parts of body, those are introduction, body 1 and 2. when it comes to introduction, there are several aspects should be written.

1. what kind of data
2. the measurement
3. the year
4. general overview.

good luck
ryan31 65 / 96 15  
Nov 15, 2016   #5
hai alfin
I have some suggestions for you
hope it helps

... information about the kinds of transport to go ...

According the table people prefer ...
According to the table, people have a tendency to use the car rather than public transport.

... who go to work use cars, ...In other hand, the higest average age who ...
overall, most people who go to the workplace utilize a car, while fewer societies using bikes for working.

... but the percentage of cylistcyclist just about 4 percent.

And the graph showsthe CO2 emissonemissions from various (...) only has aproximatelyapproximately 0,32 CO2 emission.

thanks
keep writing
mem77 62 / 98 6  
Nov 16, 2016   #6
Dear alfin, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too!

The table shows an information about the kind of transports to go to ...

According to the table people prefer to use car rather than public transport.

Overall, the most of people who (...), and the leastless people choose bikes for working.

In other hand, the highest average ages who go to work are useusing trains and buses, ...

Regards


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