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We can know something about a person by the way he dresses.


binu 1 / 8  
Apr 20, 2009   #1
There are some groups of people who believe that it is possible to know something about a person. On the other hand there are fair amount of people who disagree with this. I belong to the first type of group. Two important things we could know from the dresses are how rich he or she is and person behavior.

In my opinion the first important thing we can guess is whether that person is rich or not. Definitely, rich persons will wear only brand name dresses. Depending upon the brand name of the dress we can guess how rich he or she is. We see movie actors and actresses always dressed perfectly. Nowadays news media is always talking about how first lady Michelle Obama dresses, and how good she looks.

Second thing we can see from the dress worn by the a person is his behavior. Like for example, if a person always wears freaky dresses, we can definitely consider him as punk. On the other hand if he or she always comes to work in suit and tie, that person will be taken as scholarly gentleman. We see homeless persons always in rags. The person who uses drugs looks disheveled.

However, there are always two sides of the coin. There are few people who don't like to dress up according to his their earnings. But that accounts to only small percentage. Therefore, I strongly agree that we can know something about a person by the way he dresses.
michaelfrye1970 9 / 21  
Apr 20, 2009   #2
I would not use the analogy of freaky dress with punk. They are many types of people that dress strange for instance Goth and hippie styles. I would use something like outlandish.
OP binu 1 / 8  
Apr 20, 2009   #3
Thank you for your comment. I too think outlandish is more appropriate.
OP binu 1 / 8  
Apr 20, 2009   #4
Thank you Rajiv
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 21, 2009   #5
At the end, I think you should acknowledge that, while judging someone by the way s/he dresses, you may also get bad MISCONCEPTIONS. However, much info is revealed through one's way of dressing.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Apr 21, 2009   #6
Your first reason is okay. Certainly, people who are really rich generally dress to look it. I'd argue that the upper middle class, though, especially those born into it, tend not to go for the expensive brands, at least not as adults. They're smart enough to know that buying brands is poor value. It tends to be the lower middle class who buys them, because they can just about afford to, and want to look more well-off than they are. Still, your general point is sound.

The same cannot be said of second point. Gacy often wore business suits, and was indeed taken for a gentleman. Of course, he kept the bodies of teenage boys he'd raped and murdered under his basement floor. On the other hand, I've known many goths who dress "freaky," yet who were souls of kindness and compassion. As for people who do drugs looking disheveled, I've found that the better dressed a person is, the higher class of drugs (i.e. harder and more illegal) he is likely to do. So, I'd say your second body paragraph needs some revision. At the moment, most of what you say is just demonstrably wrong.

Perhaps you could revise both body paragraphs to provide specific details about elements of dress that might reveal something about a person? So, someone in an Armani suit is clearly very well-off, for instance. Whereas, someone in ripped jeans might be poor, or could simply be someone better off who is on a day off. Being more specific would allow you to add more depth to your analysis, which, as noted above, is a bit superficial in places.
SairaTasartir 5 / 37  
Apr 22, 2009   #7
Perhaps you could substitute "Clothes" for "dresses". Except perhaps in Michelle Obama's case. ;} It was just a little confusing at first.
twilocity - / 2  
Apr 22, 2009   #8
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OP binu 1 / 8  
Apr 23, 2009   #9
Thank you all for your help. I really appreciate it.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 23, 2009   #10
Bob, that is impressive. Did you use the help of any computer program for that? It is such a great help; if a student is willing to use that help carefully, s/he can improve in skill very much. It will take time to understand all those corrections, but they include lots of knowledge for anyone willing to study them and Google around for explanations.
OP binu 1 / 8  
Apr 23, 2009   #11
Thanks twilocity for detail explanation . I am learning to write effective essay for upcoming TOEFL ibt. Thanks.
adalumi 5 / 13  
Apr 23, 2009   #12
mmm...actually i heard comments about how bad..michelle obama is dressed. (i'm bad)

about the essay, is a good idea to talk about the uniforms? like... doctors, nurses,soldiers, firemen, workers etc...

the dressing code tells something, of course, but i don't think we should look so superficial as rich people are wearing expensive clothes and some that are taking drugs are "dishevelled".

i agree that so many rich people are taking drugs..and wearing expensive or less expensive suits..clothes etc.
OP binu 1 / 8  
Apr 24, 2009   #13
Here is my revised essay. Please give me some feedback. Thanks to all for creative comments.

Should we judge someone by the way he dresses? Well, different people will have different views depending upon their way of thinking. In my opinion, a great deal of information can be revealed by their attire. The wealth and profession are two examples. Dresses also reflect the society they belong to.

In my view, wealthy people always wear brand-named clothes. Looking at the brand name, we can pretty much guess how his financial situation is. Similarly, beggars and homeless people will be seen in rags. But, as always there are two sides of the coin. Some people will not care about the clothes they wear or some may wear high end dresses beyond their means. However, majority of the rich people wear expensive dresses and poor people wear less expensive dresses.

Furthermore, profession is another information we can gather by uniform. We see doctors wearing white coat with name tag on it. Pilots wear uniform while flying planes. Firefighter, police officer, mailman, soldiers, nurses are few other examples who wear uniforms. When we go shopping, we see sales person wearing T-shirt with their company's logo on it. In my home country, school children wear uniform during school days. So, looking at their uniform we know the school they attend.

Lastly, in my opinion, dresses also reflect the society they belong to. People from different countries have different ways of dressing. For example, Japanese wear Kimono. Nepalese and Indians women wear Sari whereas men wear shirts and pants. Western people wear pants and shirts. Even within a country, the attire is different in different parts.

Humans have tendency to judge a person by their attire and I am no exception to that. Therefore, I believe that we can know something about a person by his clothing. However, we can not deny on the fact that there is always exception to everything. There are people who do not belong to above mentioned categories.
Rajiv 55 / 400  
Apr 24, 2009   #14
Well, I must say this that thanks to the -- two response before you post a thread rule -- the thread's owner is overwhelmed with ' creative' and 'constructive' ideas that just happened to be put in ! And if s/he lacks a little confidence in their own writing, and this will be the case in this forum, you have a result like the above ! Are we going in the right direction here? Seems the usual case of quality versus quantity to me.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 24, 2009   #15
Yes, it is all going in the right direction, and the essay is much improved.

Well, different people will have different views depending upon their ways of thinking.

However, the majority of the rich people wear...

Number agreement: We see doctors wearing white coats with name tags on them.

Use a comma, here, for rhythm:
Humans have tendency to judge a person by their attire, and I am no exception to that.

This is great, binu. I see that, at the end, you noted that some people do not fit into these categories:
above-m entioned categories
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Apr 25, 2009   #16
Hmmm . . . Definitely getting better. You are misusing a key word, though:

"Dresses also reflect the society they belong to.

. . . Some people will not care about the clothes they wear or some may wear high end dresses beyond their means. However, majority of the rich people wear expensive dresses and poor people wear less expensive dresses ."

The word dresses doesn't work here. You need to use either "dress" and make the verbs singular, or "clothing." Dresses refers to a specific item of clothing that is generally limited to women, whereas you are talking about people of both genders (inasmuch as you are talking about people in general).
adalumi 5 / 13  
Apr 26, 2009   #17
Yup...I think is better.

I'm glad my idea about uniforms helped you and also I like your paragraph about national costumes.
Great improvement!
OP binu 1 / 8  
Apr 26, 2009   #18
Thanks all for your great advice.


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