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We can get knowledge from news, but some people think we can't trust the journalist. IELTS essay


logo3098 5 / 16 1  
Nov 17, 2014   #1
Q:We can get knowledge from news, but some people think we can't trust the journalist. What do you think? What qualities should a journalist have? (Report type).

The media become more advanced than before, which means that news are always around us. However, some people state that we can learn knowledge from it; others believes that we can not believe it. My view is that we can get information from the most of news.

Personally I agree that we can get lots of knowledge from the majority of news in this day and age. First of all, it is obvious that news is picked out by journalist professionals. This means that reality of news has higher quality and it will not be informal published to the public. In addition this, another reasons is that news provides a lot of up-to-date information for the public. This means that government will pay more attention to news, because if news provides a wrong news for people, this news may cause scare phenomenon. For example, news publishes a wrong information that North Korean has nuclear weapon, the public will become scare. Therefor, we can believe reality of the most of new.

The accuracy and objectively of news are the most significant features in the journalist. First and foremost, the accuracy of news that means news has responsibilities to sure that provide truth of information. If new provides inaccuracy information, the communities can not keep pace with the world. Another key factor is objectively, the professional of the media must have fair attitude, especially they must use inclusive language when they publish some news that different culture group and people with disability. Thus, these two key factors should involve in the journalist.
firstywrites 4 / 13 1  
Nov 17, 2014   #2
The media become more advanced than before, which means that news are always around us. However, some people state that we can learn knowledge from it; others believes that we can not believe it. My view is that we can get information from the most of news.

I'd change these sentences into :
The media has become more advanced than before, which means that news are always around us. Some people state that we can learn from it whereas others believe that we cannot believe it. My view is that we can get information from most of the news.
alberic - / 10 1  
Nov 17, 2014   #3
Well done! However, there are some minor mistakes that I would like to point out

Personally, I agree that we can get lots of knowledge from the majority of news in this day and age.( this sentence should locate in introduction instead of body paragraphs.

And try to connect your ideas without relying on firstly first and foremost too much.

In addition this- this words is redundant.
OP logo3098 5 / 16 1  
Nov 19, 2014   #4
who can give me more suggestions?
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Nov 19, 2014   #5
Have you given any thought to addressing the way that some people do not trust journalists for a number of reasons? You can discuss those reasons and then use them as transitions into the qualities that journalists should have since it is the very reasons that we don't trust journalists that they have to change in order to use to trust them more. You also need to properly answer the prompt about why we should or should not trust journalists. Present both sides of the issue. The one that supports the journalists and the one that does not. Present reasons as to why we can trust them and why we cannot trust them. You can talk about tabloid journalism, yellow journalism, payola in the media, etc. to explain why they cannot be trusted. Then explain that we can trust them because they are the traditional source of information, they put their lives on the line to bring us news, etc. That should help you strengthen the discussion aspects of your essay.


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