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KNOWN DEVIL IS BETTER THAN UNKNOWN; " People naturally resist changes in their live


binhpham_04 2 / 1 1  
Dec 30, 2012   #1
I welcome your recommends, I need it next week. and I really sorry about its length, but manage to read it at the end
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Some people resist that " The Devil you know is better than the one you do not " or unchange is better without thinking of its problem and solution. In this essay , unchange's key and consequence will be focused on in general

Firstly, people have tended to remain unchange or another phrase is they don't like alternation, they do the same work day by day and the result is they are lack of emotion about their life. It is obvious that there are a large number of students who always complaint about their boring lesson .And it is so strange that though the lesson is terrible , they can even afford it instead of making resolution, repairing their errors. There is simple and immediated solution for this problem that they should add some new their activities such as going to club, working in pair or in group of friends, joining in conference for student, many others.

Secondly, some people accept their present because they are not brave enough to make life-changing decision. Besides, they forget that they are constant with regrets and many opportunities are missed wastely. They can become richer, happier, more successful when they dare change on time. Therefore, they need to analyse all risk which is going to happen to them since they live in a society which aspects have never exist independently. For example, the lesson is boring due to the teaching way , they want to change another teaching , the solution are they can ask to change teacher or their teacher must alter another teaching way . The situations are their device can be refused or accepted , they can be disliked or supported by the teacher and others, they can sucess or fail in their asking, they can change or remain their issue. Do they remember that they consider which is better exactly not stimately.

Thirdly, they can be stress or even stay in high level stress if they worry about the change's problem . Some student is ill even some killed herself after the change had happened that her broken to her boy friend. Another is the deadth of the rich whoes company is broken , they are profound of convenient life , in the blinking eye they become the poor who own nothing. Although the change is extremely surprise, it is better that they do not think about change in negative way .They are the person who make desicion, they can choose which , where and when is better to them as they understand themselves most.

This essay give some issue and solution which is similar or different to you, you can choose to do like or not . Please just remember that the change cannot make decision, only you can give the answer for change or unchange.

Mein 4 / 22 2  
Dec 30, 2012   #2
Overall, your essay need more work; there are some ideas that don't connect, and some sentence is simply weird or has the opposite meaning.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 5, 2013   #3
Some people resist that " The Devil you know is better than the one you do not " or unchange is better without thinking of its problem and solution. In this essay , unchange's key and consequence will be focused on in general

... your idea lacks clarity. This is my suggestion for your opening lines;
Some people say "Known devil is better than unknown angel" and do not welcome changes. However, change is inevitable in this dynamic world.

It's always good to post your prompt, so that we can understand what the prompt requires and provide you with more relevant comments :)


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