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How the Lakeside town transformed during almost ten years period?


SYDA 11 / 21 2  
Dec 1, 2016   #1
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A breakdown of the changes in lakeside between 2000 and 2009 is revealed in the two diagrams. Overall, it is noticeable that the number of accommodation became reduced by new development, while industrial areas saw a expansion over the period. Meanwhile, the lake was changed into the pond.

In 2000, north-west part was more developed than south-east. More accommodation, ware house, art center and school were there, while only manufacturing complex and some housing areas were in south-east. There was a river that mainly divided the two parts of the region; she also created a lake to the south.

During the period, Office, university and shopping center were constructed by the reduction of housing in north-west. Derelict ware house and art center was replaced with car park and the cinema respectively in 2009. In contrast, industrial compound expand by replacing the precedence in south-east part between 2000 and 2009. Over the time the whole of the region was changed with new development.




Pramudia27 34 / 55 2  
Dec 1, 2016   #2
hellooo Syda. it is my suggestion. hopefully it can help you ((:

More accommodation, ware house, art center and school were there,(i think you should avoid to mention 4 data at same time because it look like listing) while only ...

... two parts of the region;she(who is the subject? where do you know that it is created by women? avoid to mention subject in writing task 1) also created a lake ...


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