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IELTS : Languages' extinction, discuss both views


Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion?

It is true that the increasing number of languages which are at risk of extinction has become one of the most significant issues that many people of today's society are very concerned for. The question whether our government should make an effort to preserve them by investing more money on that minority languages or not is still a debatable one. I personally suppose that no matter how widely they are spoken, every language should be protected from being disappeared

There are several reasons why saving regional languages could be seen as a waste of money. Firstly, we need to consider that if the government expands the use scope of that languages, it can be really expensive because educational programmes will need to be given so as to keep young people learning and using them. For example, some certain areas in the Southern Vietnam have been trying to help their secondary school students who are originally from khmer people speak their language beside Vietnamese, so the local government has recently struggled with their costly investments on language teachers, facilities and appropriate materials. Secondly, it is obvious that in many aspects such as communication, trade, cooperation as well as transaction, it will be absolutely easier for the whole society to work together in one language only.

Despite of the above arguments, i still strongly believe that the government should try to preserve minority languages. This is because language can be seen as much more than just one method of communication. In addition, forming a language must be undergone thousands of years; thus, it deserves to be respected and preserved. Last but not least, language is one of the essential factors creating the differences and unique cutures in the world. Therefore, saving the use of that kinds of languages in this case generally is the most important element of the cultural diversity's preservation

In conclusion, although letting languages spoken by ethnic minorities be extinct seems to be very beneficial, it will definitely impact seriously on many other aspects especially in the loss of our cultural heritages ( 343 words )

my second essay requiring both views' discussion, check my mistakes in this one and give me any better sentences that can replace mine? thanks alot :D

Jun 1, 2014   #2
The question whether our government should make an effort to preserve them by investing more money on that minority languages or not is still a debatable one

I think you should write: The question whether our government should make an effort to preserve minority languages by money investment is still a debatable one.

Last but not least, language is one of the essential factors creating the differences and unique cutures in the world

Do you mean the "differences between unique cultures" or "different unique cultures'?

Well, in general your essay is quite clear to me. But do you think it's a little long? Can you handle in 40 mins or less?

I see that you have long sentences, try to use more academic words to curtail those, thus make your essay more attractive I guess :) Your structures need to vary a bit to make your essay diverse :) That's my opinion :)
yeah , i like something kinda short and concise but i dont know why everytime i write essays, i often make them toooooooooo long LOL, maybe because of my long sentences, and lack of academic words is always my trouble, thank u for your advice , i will try more to vary my structures in my next one :D
For example, some certain areas in the Southern Vietnam have been trying to help their secondary school students who are originally from khmer people speak their language beside Vietnamese, so the local government has recently struggled with their costly investments on language teachers, facilities and appropriate materials.

I think this sentence is too long, you can separate it becomes two sentences

it will be definitely impact seriously on many other aspects especially in the loss of our cultural heritages

modal should be followed by verb 1, it cannot be followed by adverb or adjective


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