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larger library, rooms reconstruction, road... - Task 1: Layout of Woodwards University Over 30 Years


fahmisadja 33 / 33 34  
Nov 5, 2015   #1
The map illustrates the changes of layout that have occurred in Woodwards University, over a 30 year period beginning in 1985 and ending in 2015. At first glance, the most noticeable change is the replacement of buildings to be united. Moreover, road and parking areas is altered to many of green spaces and footpaths.

To begin, the library has been built larger than before and has been joined with IT center room. In the east, in front of library and IT center, Science Laboratories were constructed which is union of Physics, Chemistry, and Biology Block. In addition, Car Park was altered to become Lecturer Theatre. Then, there are footpaths which connect between library to laboratory and IT Center to Lecture Theatre.

There have also been changed to the parking area and road. Just south of Library and IT Center, the big Car park was demolished and changed by Shuttle Bus Terminal. Next, new appearance Admin Building was erected beside of footpaths between those buildings. Beside the footpaths have altered the road position, green areas were also constructed to surround the complex of university.




M3L1 26 / 6 11  
Nov 5, 2015   #2
Hi Masdar, I find a few miss spelling on your essay. Hope you find it yourself.

Since the size of admin building is dramatically changed, why don't you include it in your writing, instead of just mention the altered position.

hope it helps. thank you
chandnimaishery 3 / 6  
Nov 5, 2015   #3
There are few corrections I would like to point out:

The map illustrates the changes of in layout that have occurred in ...

Moreover, road and parking areas is are altered to ...
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Nov 6, 2015   #4
Hi Mr. Fahmy...
Your writing is good..
I will give few suggestions to your writing..

Moreover, road and parking areas isare altered to many of green spaces and footpaths.

... and has been joinedclustered with IT center room.
... which were constructed which is union of Physics, Chemistry ...

Note: You should make clearly cluster to body paragraph. For example, you can explain about education building at first body paragraph and support facilities at second body paragraph.


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