Ok... let's look at the strucutre'
Hook - An interesting statement to catch the reader's attention
.... Your intro does not contain this feature. It is something like;
Being able to communicate in a foreign language is also an added advantage. ... this hook should be catchy as well as relevant to your topic.
2. Background - Give the context to the reader
2.1. Definition of the question
2.2. Importance of the question (why it is important to discuss this argument)
.... well, this is about rephrasing your prompt. (You have not included the full prompt here, so we guess it is about an argument on learning a foreign language from a young age is good or bad... Always include your prompt in your post)
Some experts hold the view it is always better to start learning a foreign language from a young age. (definition) However, some others argue that it may confuse the children about their identity. ( importance of the question - this I guessed because I haven't seen your prompt.)
Although there are some merits in learning a foreign language from a young age, I too do not support this idea for several reasons. ... state your opinion clearly.