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Learning foreign languages at childhood will maximize language skills in the future


abdik 3 / 5 1  
Nov 26, 2016   #1
Being able to speak a foreign language is an advantage these days.
Some people think that children should start learning a foreigner language at primary school, while others think children in the secondary school.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.


Nowadays, The ability to speak two or three languages is always a plus, and the fact that you will learn it at your childhood is perfect, and it will maximize your language skills in the future, so, many people argue about the perfect time that children have to start taking second language courses, some believes that it should be at the primary school while others think that secondary school is the best period to start. Personally, I reckon that modern languages should be taught at the secondary school and any earlier time will have adverse ramifications on children . This essay will discuss both views.

Some parents believes the earlier we will teach our children a new language, the earlier they will learn it, and perhaps learn other languages after that. The reason behind that is some studies showed that a kid has a phenomenal memoir abilities, and they can learn quickly compared to an adult. For example adults can still remember the story that it has been telling them at their childhood and they can even still tell those stories to their kids too. So learning a modern language at primary school is mandatory.

On the other hand, other people think that at primary school, kids start to discover what is education, how to write, read and manipulate numbers, children have to learn those basic things in their mother tongue language, start learning a new language is very unnecessary at this period, it will has just a negative consequences for the children's education future by disturbing them on focusing

On basic mathematic or physic rules. Modern language is definitely a plus for kids but secondary school is the best time to learn it. I agree.

To conclude, I believe that modern languages are very important to be taught the secondary school, at this period students just start to release what is important for them and what is not. The time period of giving courses to our children is crucial, we have to be careful with it.

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Nov 26, 2016   #2
Rouggal, you can't just agree with an opinion in the essay when you are clearly being asked to present your own opinion and defend it alongside the two points of view that you have to discuss. So, you should have 3 paragraphs in this essay body that should represent 3 things: the pro, the con, and your opinion. You represent 2 out of 3 at this point. That explains why your paragraphs are short by one. You did not properly represent and discuss your opinion in support of one of the two sides you are expected to present within the discussion. It seems that you decided to present your opinion as the conclusion to the essay. You cannot do that. You are not allowed to present a new discussion within the conclusion as a closing statement. That is because the recap of the essay discussion is expected to be placed in the concluding paragraph. Needless to say, your essay has plenty of room for improvement in terms of task accuracy, coherence and cohesion, as well as the lexical resource and grammar accuracy. In fairness to you, I won't score your essay using the criteria previously mentioned so that you will have a chance to revise your essay to better be prompt adherent.
Dioba 68 / 104 7  
Nov 27, 2016   #3
Hi,below through my advice for you.
1. The reason behind that is some studies showed that a kid has a phenomenal memoir abilities, and they can learn quickly compared to an adult.(supporting sentence). For example (put comma) adults can still remember ... So learning a modern language at primary school is mandatory ( example) --> In the first sentence, you represent that children has more abilities rather than adult while the example you give adult to represent your idea. I think not make sense with your supporting sentence.

3.Some parents believes believe
4. You not answer the question properly and you should compare between 2 sides. Unfortunately, you only explain about Some people think that children should start learning a foreigner language at primary school and not explore about others think children in the secondary school. only a little information you explain about secondary school.
yika 6 / 12 1  
Dec 8, 2016   #4
Hello, this is my suggestion and correction for you

1. you must recheck your sentence formation. you able to write some simple sentence, but you must write in the right formation because I am confuse with your long sentence with some conjunction.

for the example :

Nowadays, The ability to speak.......is the best period to start.(you can write into 2 until 3 variation sentence. don't wrtite in long sentence which will make confuse the readers)

2. Some parents believesbelieve the earlier (remember subject-verb agreement)

3. other people thinkregard(you can write "regard" which have same meaning with "think")

thank you


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