Very pleased to have the constructive criticism :) thank you
Summary task 3Learning Vacation
Learning vacation is a new concept of holiday in 20th century, that offers the tripper to spend their vacation in educational endeavors. Where the society could acquire something new and useful, not only to learn exciting subject but also stimulating the creativity. . The community interested in this type of holiday starts from the young until the adult. Various trips of learning vacations are join an ongoing archeological, cooking lesson program, language summer camp and so on. This kind of vacation is selected by 30% tourists every single year, and the numbers are increasingThe travellers are capable to hone their skills of photography, writing, cooking, dancing and others under supervision of the experts. Another upside of this category of trips is the price will be suitable for economical budget than the traditional vactions.
First off, you have a couple minor errors I would like to point out:
1. In the first sentence, you need to either have an article (a, an, the, etc.) before "Learning vacation". Suggested edit: "Learning vacations are a new concept for holidays that was developed in the 20th century..."
2. The second sentence is a fragment. Taking out the "Where" in the beginning would fix it.
3. Instead of saying "Various trips of learning vacations" (which doesn't make a whole lot of sense), maybe say, "Some examples of learning vacations are..."?
The last couple sentences just have a couple grammatical errors that I will highlight and fix:
... is selected by 30% of tourists every (...) are increasing. The travellers are capable
to hone of honing their skills (...) and others under the supervision of the experts.
... budget than the traditional
vactions vacations .
Hi Rosa, below are thoughts on your essay.
- holiday in the 20th century,
- that offers the
trippertraveler to spend
- but also stimulating their creativity. .
communitydemographics that are interested
untiland the adults too .
joinfocused on an ongoing archeological,
cap able to hone their skills of photography
Another upside ofFurther to this category of
- trips is the price
will bethat is suitable
economical budget conscious travelers than
There you have it Rosa, I hope the corrections are helpful.
Overall, it is a well managed essay, for future writing reference, however, mind the words that you incorporate in your essay and I believe reading will help you widen your vocabulary and in the long run, it will help in creating a well written and well structured essay.
Hi rosadesiana ,
Learning vacation is a new concept of holiday in ...
===> Learning vacations are new concept for holidays and improve since of 20th century, that offer travellers ...
but also stimulating the creativity. . The community interested in this ...
===> but also stimulate their creativity. The community who interested of this type starts from young to adult .
numbers are increasingThe travellers are capable to ...
===> numbers are increasing. The travellers are able to hone their skills ...
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