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LEARNING VACATION as a new concept of holiday in 20th century - SUMMARY TASK 3


rosadesiana 38 / 40 2  
Aug 26, 2016   #1
Very pleased to have the constructive criticism :) thank you

Summary task 3
Learning Vacation

Learning vacation is a new concept of holiday in 20th century, that offers the tripper to spend their vacation in educational endeavors. Where the society could acquire something new and useful, not only to learn exciting subject but also stimulating the creativity. . The community interested in this type of holiday starts from the young until the adult. Various trips of learning vacations are join an ongoing archeological, cooking lesson program, language summer camp and so on. This kind of vacation is selected by 30% tourists every single year, and the numbers are increasingThe travellers are capable to hone their skills of photography, writing, cooking, dancing and others under supervision of the experts. Another upside of this category of trips is the price will be suitable for economical budget than the traditional vactions.

thebslee 1 / 1 1  
Aug 26, 2016   #2
Hello!

First off, you have a couple minor errors I would like to point out:
1. In the first sentence, you need to either have an article (a, an, the, etc.) before "Learning vacation". Suggested edit: "Learning vacations are a new concept for holidays that was developed in the 20th century..."

2. The second sentence is a fragment. Taking out the "Where" in the beginning would fix it.
3. Instead of saying "Various trips of learning vacations" (which doesn't make a whole lot of sense), maybe say, "Some examples of learning vacations are..."?

The last couple sentences just have a couple grammatical errors that I will highlight and fix:
... is selected by 30% of tourists every (...) are increasing. The travellers are capable to hone of honing their skills (...) and others under the supervision of the experts.

... budget than the traditional vactions vacations .
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Aug 26, 2016   #3
Hi Rosa, below are thoughts on your essay.

- holiday in the 20th century,
- that offers the trippertraveler to spend
- but also stimulating their creativity. .
- The communitydemographics that are interested
- young untiland the adults too .
- are joinfocused on an ongoing archeological,
- cap able to hone their skills of photography
- Another upside ofFurther to this category of
- trips is the price will bethat is suitable
- for economical budget conscious travelers than

There you have it Rosa, I hope the corrections are helpful.
Overall, it is a well managed essay, for future writing reference, however, mind the words that you incorporate in your essay and I believe reading will help you widen your vocabulary and in the long run, it will help in creating a well written and well structured essay.
ibal28 20 / 30 5  
Aug 27, 2016   #4
Hi rosadesiana ,

Learning vacation is a new concept of holiday in ...
===> Learning vacations are new concept for holidays and improve since of 20th century, that offer travellers ...

but also stimulating the creativity. . The community interested in this ...
===> but also stimulate their creativity. The community who interested of this type starts from young to adult .

numbers are increasingThe travellers are capable to ...
===> numbers are increasing. The travellers are able to hone their skills ...

Keep writing!!
Fadhilahumar91 61 / 73 6  
Aug 27, 2016   #5
hii..

t of holiday inthe 20th century

... not only to learn exciting subject but also stimulating thestimulate their creativity. .

The communitySome people interested in this type of holiday ...

... learning vacations are joinjoining an ongoing archeological...

the numbers are increasingThe travellers are capable toincrease a number of travelers that capable to....

the price will be suitable for economical budgetcheaper than the traditional vactions.

thank you


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