The least popular transportation chosen by the workers is cycling or walking

The CO2 Emissions from Different Forms of Transport

The following table and the bar chart give data about travelling to work in Houston, Texas. To begin, the table provides information about the percentage of travelers per form transport to work and average age of them based on four transportation's; car for one person, car contains more than one person, cycling or walking, and train or bus. Meanwhile the bar chart shows the CO2 Emissions from different forms of transport. Eventually, there is connection between both the table and the chart.

The last popular transportation chosen by the workers is cycling or walking which is only four percent aged 44 of travelers have courage to choose them. However, it is totally use no CO2 Emission. Furthermore, catching bus or train is in the second used by 37 percent of the commuters aged 47, but the CO2 Emission consumed is just over the percentage of the last popular one. Having about 0.07 kilograms per person per kilometer of CO2 Emission, the third popular transport taken is car rode by four people which only 11 percent of the workers aged 44 took it.

The most common transportation used by the commuters to work in Houston, Texas is car for one person. As much as 48 percent aged 43 in average choose this way. Unfortunately, this way of travel is not worth at all when it comes to the CO2 Emission issue. It drains 0.31 kilograms per person per kilometer of CO2 Emission. In this case, all of the commuters riding car alone eventually consumed 24 kilograms per person per kilometer of CO2 Emission. In conclusion, people is tend to ride car alone instead of use the zero emissions transportation.

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Hi Alrisky, below are my thoughts on the first 2 paragraphs of your analysis, I hope this helps.

- The following table and the bar chart gives data
- about travellingon how to travel to work in Houston, Texas.
- To begin with , the table provides information
- about the percentage of travelers per formmode of transport to
- work and their average age of them based on four - Eventually, there is a connection between both ...

- The last popular transportation chosen by the workers is
- However, it is totally use noThis mode of transportation uses no CO2 Emission.
- Furthermore, catching the bus or train
- is in the second mode of transportation used by 37 percent
- which is only 11 percent of the workers aged 44 who took it.

There you have it Alrisky, I hope the corrections above are helpful to your revision and I wish to review the final analysis soon.

... information about the percentage of travelers per form transport to work people who travel by each ...
-Meanwhile, (don't forget the comma here)the bar chart shows the amount of CO2 Emissions emitted from different formsmean/mode of transport
-EventuallyIn addition, there is connection between both ... (eventually= finally, only used in listing or describing multi-step process, we don't normally use these words in an overview. As your attached picture is to vague, I'm not sure about the purpose of this paragraph)

-The lastThe least popular transportation chosen ...

Hi Kiki.
These are my thoughts about your writing. In this moment, I only focus on content of your introduction. I hope you can meet my notes and deal with them.


You should paraphrase this because this is identic with origin statement.
THE TABLE REVEALS HOW CITIZENS IN HOUSTON GO TO WORK BASED ON SOME GROUPS OF AGE. ON THE OTHER HAND, THE LEVEL OF EMISSIONS RELEASED BY A FEW TRANSPORTS IS PRESENTED IN THE BAR CHART.

You should offer the overview of your writing in the first paragraph. The overview is one of essential elements in the writing. Due to having limited time, you are supposed to write that in the first paragraph. You cannot get the score more than 6 if you do not write the overview.

This is the alternative overview.
OVERALL, IT IS IMPORTANT TO NOTE THAT ONLY FEW TRAVELLERS WALK OR CYCLE GOING TO A WORKPLACE, WHILE THE CARS WITH HAVING ONE PASSENGER BECOME THE MOST POPULAR AS THE TRANSPORT TO TRAVEL TO OFFICE. ON THE ONE HAND, OWING TO REACHING THE HIGHEST RATE, THE CARS HAVING A DRIVER SOLELY AND NO PASSENGERS GENERATE THE EMISSIONS WITH THE GREATEST PROPORTION.

You are able to achieve the higher score on condition that you have a bravery to compare the figures. There is the statement that one of the task responses is comparing the data.

As many as you read examples of the writing task 1, you can understand better and get the sense of the writing task 1.
Keep spirit.
GOOD LUCK.