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Leisure and education became the least expenditure that people spent on in 2002.


nurainiyusuf16 47 / 83 6  
Nov 8, 2016   #1
The table above gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table elucidates information about the percentage of people's expenditure for several things in five different countries, including Ireland, Italy, Sweden, and Turkey in the year 2002. As is presented in the table, most of people in those countries spent their income for their diet such as in food, beverages, and tobacco. The lowest was for their leisure or study necessary.

To begin with, the highest outlay was spent in food stuff such as meal, drink, and tobacco. In Turkey and Ireland, the percentage in diet spent almost a third nearly five times higher than expenditure in clothing and footwear. On the other hand, Spain and Sweden spent their income in dress about three times less in diet. Meanwhile, in Italy people spent 16.36 percent of their income for their foodstuff almost twice than clothing.

Leisure and education became the least expenditure that people spent in 2002. Only 4.35 percent of Turkey people's income spent on pastime and education. The result was nearly same for others countries, which was no more than 5 percent. 


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Holt [Contributor] - / 7,667 2036  
Nov 8, 2016   #2
Nuraini, tobacco is considered a leisure item so you should not have listed it among the food supplies. Remember to properly state the classification of your items because this has a direct relation on your comprehension skills and also allows the reviewer to better judge your knowledge of English terms and classifications. I believe that your score for this test would range somewhere between the 6 and 7 options due to certain strengths that can be found in your presentation. You also tried and somewhat effectively used heightened grammar skills in terms of vocabulary and sentence. Which is what pushed your score, in my opinion, towards the higher scoring bracket. You were able to present a proper summary and understandable data discussions within the essay. It would seem that your writing and comprehension skills are somewhat entering the intermediate level of English use. Good work.
IvanMS027 43 / 56 9  
Nov 8, 2016   #3
Hi. Here are my suggestions for you.

..., Italy, Sweden, and Turkey (you forgot to mention Spain) in the year 2002. As isit presented in the table, most of the people in those countries ...

... for their leisure or study necessary .

... diet spent almost a third(,) nearly five times ...
On the other hand, the people of Spain and (...) income in dress aboutalmost three times less incompared to the diet.

Only 4.35 percent of Turkey people'sTurkish's income spent on ...
The result was nearly as same forasothers countries ,

I hope it can be useful for you.
Goodluck and Keep Spirited


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