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IELTS; Leisure time is for improving mind or resting mind?


mario_nagi 2 / 3 1  
Jun 19, 2013   #1
Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles.
Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.

You should write at least 250 words.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

It is generally believed that leisure time is needed to recover from the stress of everyday life.There are a lot of ways one can spend his spare time doing. Personally, I prefer doing activities that improve my mind like reading and learning programming languages.

Reading is one of my favourite activities, because it provide me with a lot of new and interesting information about a lot of different topics and places without even moving from my chair. For example, I learned a lot about Japan's tradition and culture from reading about it. Reading is an inexpensive, tremendous source of information that provide the reader with hours and hours of entertainment and delight without boring him and that why reading is one of my best spare time activities.

Another great activity that can be done in spare time is learning programming languages due to its amazing capabilities in converting a simple code into a working program that can do a lot of different functions. An example of this is the word processing programs that can interpret, correct and organize your essays and letters. Also, learning programming languages could open a lot of job opportunities for you in the future from designing simple webpages to complex programs.

In conclusion, it is best to spend your leisure time doing activities that can improve your mind and adding new information and experiences. Although what you do in your spare time is up to you and no one can force you to do anything, you should spend it all on beneficial activities that can improve your mind.

niesaysi 16 / 284 83  
Jun 19, 2013   #2
Another great activity that can be done in spare time is learning programming languages because it has useful capabilities to convert a simple code into a working program capable in doing different functions like word processing programs that can interpret, correct and organize your essays and letters.

Note: As I read your essay, I just observed that you focused only on your point of interest upon spending your leisure time. It is indicated in your topic the other stand of resting mind during spare time. Although you have mentioned a bit in your intro supporting such ( .... to recover from the stress of everyday life ), I think you still need to give more details about it.

Hope my feedback will help you a lot:)
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jun 19, 2013   #3
There are a lot of ways one can spend his spare time doing .

There are lots of ways that one can spend his leisure time.
Well... it's good if you posted your prompt... Then we know exactly what they expect from your response. Does it ask for your opinion about what you prefer to do during your leisure time or what is your view on this argument?
ellie_lcl 2 / 2  
Jun 19, 2013   #4
It is generally believed that leisure time is needed to recover from the stress of everydaydaily life.There are a lot of ways that one can spend his spare time doing . Personally, I prefer to haveing activities that improve my intelligencemind like reading andor upgrade my technical skill such as learning programming languages


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