PLEASE HELP TO CHECK MY ESSAY.IT'S AN IELTS ESSAY~~~ THX!!!
Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from others sources (such as the internet, television).To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Over the last half century the change in the life of human begings has increased beyond our wildest expectations. There are countless new technological equipments flooding into our lives, such as the Internet, television and cell phone. They all enrich our daily lives.Now, many students learn from Internet after class and they find it quite helpful.
Many people find that students at schools and universities still learn much more from lessons with teachers. They argue that teachers teach students how to write, read and calculate since they are in kindergarten.And when they are in primary school, teachers teach them more further knowledge, like writing skills and using computers.It is teachers that help them with obstacles in schooling. On the other hand, students gain most of the knowledge through teachers and learn what is right and wrong with the assistance of teachers.
Those who feel that students learn far more from other sources, such as the Internet and television, frimly believe that within this sources students learn lots of things which they can't learn in classes. They can only input some key words and google it, and then there are numberless articles and websites related to it. In this case, stundents learn things easily. Moreover, they contend that good television programmes do teach students.For instance, Discovery Channel has many instructive episodes. Students have knowledge of others cultrues, outer space etc.
Personally, I think that students learn far more from their teachers than from other source. Because not only do teachers teach us knowlegde but also the skills to tell right from wrong. Just imagine: if a student can't even make out whether the source is reasonable or not , then how can he get the right information to help him to learn?
hi,effy_sun
i think you'd better propose your opinion in your first paragraph. then you can further explain the different roles the hi-technology and the teachers play, you have to highlight the position of your support. This may be more in-depth. In addition, it is the best also to reiterate your opinion at the end .
this is my personal opinion as a reader and the little experience learned from Sean and Kevin...:)
Kirin's advice is excellent. Start out with your own stance, a thesis as it were, and then list three reasons why you believe your thesis to be true. So, come up with three reasons why people learn more from professors rather than from other sources. You might ask yourself why classes even have professors. After all, most classes involve reading set texts listed on a syllabus. So, why couldn't a student simply skip classes and keep up with the readings on his or her own time? (Hint: some students do just this, especially if there is no attendance mark for a class. Have these students learned to beat the system, or are they missing something important in terms of their education? If the latter, what exactly are they missing?) Good luck with your second draft.
Now, many students learn from educational and informative sources on the Internet after class, and they find it quite helpful.
...firmly believe that, with these sources, s tudents learn lots of things which they cannot learn in class .
Yes, I agree with the others: it is good to tell them your main point at the start, then explain it, and then tell it again at the end. Good luck!!
thank you very much. do u mean i should give my main point in the first paragragy? but shouldn't the first paragrahy be the background about the title.
im confused...
anyway, thx for all your advice!!! =)
hi, thank you for your advice. i think i ignore the title"To what extent do you agree or disagree". so i shuold just write that my agreemeet and give some evidence. but if sometimes i want to remaine neutral, how should i write the body?
thx!!! =]
You do agree. You wrote that you think teachers are important, and you backed it up with good points.
That is your main idea, which should be put forth in the first paragraph. In elaborating on the title, you give the thesis statement and explain it.
Then, in the body of the essay, you make your supporting arguments. At the end, you restate the thesis, and summarize your arguments from the body of the essay.
Does that help answer your questions?
oh,yes,sure it does. i appreciate your help!
