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IELTS - the level of education among women in the land experienced an upgrade


maritsanur 5 / 8 2  
Oct 22, 2014   #1
Highest Level of Education of Women in Someland (1945 and 1955)

The pie charts illustrate the differences of highest level of educated women in someland between 1945 and 1955, a period of 5 decades.
It is clear that the portion of women who were not schooling, third grade, and year 6 saw a dramatic decline, while the number of women who finished their first degree inclined for almost 50 %.

The number of no schooling, third grade and year 6 women at the place accounted 85 percent in 1945. Conversely, the number of those three grades dropped significantly to zero percent after 5 decades. On the other hand, the women who study in their 12 yr olds increased for about 16%, from 4% to 20%. In addition, first degree and post graduate educated women at that place dramatically rose. The first degree rose for about 49% and the post graduate increased to 20% from zero percent in the first question year. Educated women in years 6 remained stable at 10% during the period.

To conclude, the level of education women in the land experienced an upgrade. It showed from the dramatic increase of the number of post graduate and first degree and from the significant decrease of women who no schooling, third grade and year 6.




eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Oct 24, 2014   #2
The pie charts illustrate the differences of highest level of educated women in someland between 1945 and 1955, a period of 5 decade s.

The pie charts illustrate how educated women in someland attain their high levels of education between 1945 and 1955, a period of 5 decades.

It is clear that the portion of women who were not schooling,..

this is well presented :D.

The number of no schooling,..

Break this paragraph into, as it helps readers understand the points of comparison and contrast.

To conclude, the level of education women in the land experienced an upgrade..

Well, you don't need to present a conclusion when it comes to IELTS task 1.


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