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Life and Art - Art immortalizes life.


sarita Rana 1 / -  
Jun 9, 2011   #1
Life is the period in a individual from day of birth till death. Once an individual is born, he/she remains bland in their mind without anything or in other words individual mind remains blank print into which everything is recored in course of growth.

Art is any creation of an individual during his/her life time.Creation of Art could be any Poem, Story, Printing etc. Such creations are always dumb, means they never speaks but inside these they speak a lot. Art being lifeless gives life to the creator.This means to say that life is ends up, but Art immortalizes life.
ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Jun 9, 2011   #2
-Life is the period in an
(individual's ) life from (the) day of birth (until) death.

-Once an individual
is born, he/she remains
(blank) in their minds without anything or, in other words, (individual's) mind remains
(like a ) blank print on which everything is recored in the course of growth.

-Art is any creation of an
individual during his/her lifetime.Creation of Art could be any poem, story, printing etc.

- Such creations are
always dumb (dumb is not a good word to use here- u can use numb), means they
never speak but inside
these they speak a lot. Art
being lifeless gives life to
the creator.This means to
say that life ends up, but
art immortalizes life.

- your sentences are very thoughtful, just a little more attention is needed on vocabulary and sentence structuring.

good luck
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jun 11, 2011   #3
Hi Sarita, do you understand all of the corrections Ajit gave here?

I like your ideas. It's interesting to discuss art within the context of a human life. I am born, and I create are until I die. :-)


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