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IELTS: Life was better when technology was simpler.


alexwater 3 / 2  
Apr 17, 2014   #1
Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Technology has always been influencing our lives throughout human history, especially in recent decades. However, there are some people complaining technology makes life more complicated rather than simpler. Personally, I disagree with this view.

I would argue technological developments in various areas have transformed our world enormously, making our lives much simpler. One of the biggest technological breakthroughs in last few years is the invention of the internet, which greatly improves people's working efficiency and productivity. It also enables people to enjoy easier life by providing online shopping stores so that they do not need to go traditional department stores, which tends to be tiring. People's communication also becomes much more convenient and efficient with the help of smart mobile phones and WI-FI technology. Thanks to them, we can keep in touch with our family members and friends anywhere and at any time. At home,all kinds of high-tech appliances not only allow us to live a life of ease,but also make our life quite enjoyable. For example, washing machines can help us do all the laundry, while high definition TVs are able to produce amazing special effects,making TV programmes more entertaining.

Still, sometimes technology does make things a little difficult,particularly to the elderly who are not willing to learn new things. One of the usually complained problems is that there are too many options when it comes electronic devices. IPhones,IPads,laptops etc. have so many similar functions that sometimes it is really hard for consumers to make choice. Also, most intelligent electronic devices are based on complicated operating systems, and therefore users have to spend quite some time on learning before feeling comfortable with them. Worse still, once they stop working,usually because of defects within them, all the convenience given by them would disappear.

In conclusion,although I accept things may occasionally become a little complicated due to technology,overall technology has enabled people to live much simpler lives.
totappa 2 / 1  
Apr 17, 2014   #2
elaborate second point.Give your own experience like your trouble when purchasing a new mobile or something
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 17, 2014   #3
Technology has always been influencing our lives throughout humanthe history, especially in recent decades.

Good introduction :) You follow the appropriate structure for the intro :)

I would argue technological developments in various areas...

Well, this body para is pretty big. You might have problems with managing time for this task if you do not follow a more strategic approach.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Apr 19, 2014   #4
Yes, follow the approach that Pahan has suggested to you. This task has a major bearing on time and managing time effectively would play a great role in your score. Your target should be to score well with a good structure that contains all the features that are necessary for you to earn marks, as well as you need to manage time effectively to complete the task at the exam :)

The suggested structure helps both those goals :)
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 19, 2014   #5
At home,all kinds of high-tech appliances not only allow us to live a life of ease,but also make our life quite enjoyable. For example, washing machines can help us do all the laundry, while high definition TVs are able to produce amazing special effects,making TV programmes more entertaining.

I like this paragraph. You have composed a good strategy. Beginning by describing a scenario, you end with a proof that this whole idea is helpful in creating fully understanding. However, this is a very bulky paragraph.

etc.

You don't need to use lazy language expressions (eg 'etc', or and so forth') They are are used more in spoken language. Also, this indicates you don't care enough to finish a sentence properly. Better omit.

One of the usually complained problems (how do you know that this brings a common complaint ???) is that there are too many options when it comes electronic devices.

many similar functions (what are they???) that sometimes it is really hard for consumers to make choice

accept things

don't leave a vague word for your readers. Better re-say


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