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Personal life of famous person is no longer "personal"


Jin 11 / 37  
Sep 23, 2009   #1
Q: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.

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With the remarkable development of public media, the personal life of famous person is no longer "personal". Personally, I cannot agree more with that today's television, newspaper, magazines and other media pay too much attention to them.

Every day, there are plenty of journalists waiting outside of the homes of famous people. They take photos about the things they do and the people they meet. If there is something strange happened, the tomorrow's title page will appear the news of this person. Sometimes it is absurd and annoying, and to certain extent, has disturbed the normal life of those people, or even been harmful to them. The typical example is Princess Dianna, who is died in a traffic accident. After she had dinner with her boyfriend, the couple found there was a journalist who wanted to take photos with them. Wanting to get rid of him, the couple drove faster and faster so that they didn't notice another car coming to them. This situation also happened in other countries, many Korea TV stars have suicide themselves because of the highly concerned by the public, which also occurred in China. This situation has showed that public should give these persons a room to relax and work.

Another situation often happened to these super stars is that the news from them is always not about their works. It is more likely that public is now interested in their relationship with other people, instead of their hard work. When you read the newspapers, the most news appeared in them are like one has broken up with his lover, the couple of star C and D want to divorce, or even star E enter the relationship between F and G, etc.. However, as far as I am concerned, it is the private part of people's lives, nobody should tell other ones about their private life, even though they are famous.

To sum up, because of the too much attention paid by public media, famous people cannot live normally, which should be stopped.

CantWrite 1 / 1  
Sep 23, 2009   #2
the personal life of famous person is no longer "personal".

Sounds awkward. Use "famous people" or "personal lives of famous people"

Personally, I cannot agree more with that today's television

Try something like: "agree more with this in that today's television". Again it sounds awkward.

If there is something strange happened

Change it to: "If there is something strange that has happened"

tomorrow's

Change to: "next day's title page"

and to certain extent

change to: "and to a certain extent"

has disturbed the normal life of those people

More specific, who are "those people"?

who is died

Change to: "who has died". Tense is incorrect

I am short in time right now so that is all I can do.

Hope I helped = )
OP Jin 11 / 37  
Sep 24, 2009   #3
CantWrite
really thank for your help~~~~

because I want to finish it within 30 mins, so I have not so much time to think about or even wirte a draft.
linhexi 9 / 28  
Sep 27, 2009   #4
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thinhtvdhtm 41 / 97  
Sep 27, 2009   #5
With the remarkable development of public media, the personal life of famous person is no longer "personal". Personally, I do not agree with the statement thay today's television, newspaper, magazines and other media pay too much attention to them.


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