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'Life without such little creatures as pets' - IELTS


Anuar KZ 2 / 4  
Nov 10, 2011   #1
Too much attention is paid and too much money is spent on keeping pets, while people throughout the world are starving.

It is absolutely impossible to imagine our life without such little creatures as pets. Are they not our "little brothers"? In different countries people keep various kinds of animals like rabbits, parrots, dogs, cats, even reptiles or cockroaches. But sometimes this hobby may cost a lot. If too much money is spent on pets, many people throughout the world will be dying from starvation. For example, in many rich countries domestic animals are given better food to eat than poor people.

First of all, dogs for example are very helpful for people. They can help the blind as guide-dogs. Furthermore, pets are very good friends for lonely men, and they keep affection and loyalty to their owners throughout their life. There are so many cases when the pets were dying on their owner's graves. Additionally, "little brothers" are so friendly, gay and joyful that so many people treat them like children. In addition pets can help adults and children relate to animals and nature more. On the one hand, having domestic animals is not as bad as it seems to be. Keeping pets is of great benefit for everybody.

But on the other hand, some people spend too much money on pets than it is necessary. They purchase special clothes, even jewelry and toys for adored creatures. They feed them with delicates sometimes unaffordable for ordinary people. In contrast, there are so many people dying every day from starvation in the world. What can be done to prevent them from passing away? The best idea is to inform the humanity about the existing situation. We shall be able to find the way out only together.

In conclusion, we should take care about our "little brothers" because when we take care about the wild we take care about ourselves. The humanity is responsible for safe and successful future of the next generation.

written by me with corrections of my teacher
brianaor 2 / 4  
Nov 11, 2011   #2
It is absolutely impossible to imagine our life without such little creatures as pets. Are they not our "little brothers"? In different countries people keep various kinds of animals like rabbits, parrots, dogs, cats, even reptiles or cockroaches. But sometimes this hobby may cost a lot, not very descriptive, how about "more than you think" . If too much money is spent on pets, many people throughout the world will bedyingdie from starvation. For example, in many rich countries domestic animals are given better food to eat than poor people.

Maybe you could say, These dogs dogs are very helpful to people,First of all, dogs for example are very helpful for people. They can help the blind as guide-dogs. Furthermore In addition, pets are very good friends to lonely men, and they keepremain affectionate and loyalty loyal to their owners throughout their life. There are so many cases when the pets were dying on their owner's graves .of pets laying on their owner's graves. Additionally, "little brothers" are so friendly, gayaffectionate and joyfulenergetic that so many people treat them like children. In addition pets can help adults and children relate to animals and nature more. On the one hand, having domestic animals is not as bad as it seems to be. Keeping pets is of great benefit for everybody.

But on the other hand, some people spend too much money on pets than it is necessary. They purchase special clothes, even jewelry and toys for adored creatures. They feed them with delicates sometimes unaffordable for ordinary people. In contrast, there are so many people dying every day from starvation in the world. What can be done to prevent them from passing away? The best idea is to inform the humanity about the existing situation. We shall be able to find the way out only together.

In conclusion, we should take care about our "little brothers" because when we take care about the wild we take care about ourselves. The humanity is responsible for safe and successful future of the next generation.

written by me with corrections of my teacher

YOu clearly state that money and time is spent on pets. there are some grammatical errors that I started editing, but there are a few more. I don't see any thing about the spending too much money and there isn't any mention of starving and poverty. While the prompt appears to want a persuasive respone, you provided inforamtion and not presuasion
OP Anuar KZ 2 / 4  
Nov 11, 2011   #3
Thank you for correction.


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