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life in prison is better punishment than death penalty


thinhtvdhtm 41 / 97  
Oct 18, 2009   #1
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By punishing murderers with death penalty, society is also guilt of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement


In the 18 century BC, death penalty was used at first time, and at that time, people listed detail how a person could be put to death if she or he did not obey the rules. Until now, this kind of punishment is still used in most of countries in the world. Some people think that this kind of punishment is too inhumane, so government should abolish the capital punishment. Personally, I definitely agree with this opinion for several reasons below.

First of all, there is no one has the right to take other one's life away. People are born by God, and God is only person who has this right. Human beings should not kill human beings. Even if criminals have committed horrible crimes, the government does not have the right to execute them. Taking those people into prison is a good solution; because this is a deserved punishment for their crimes and this kind of punishment is much more humane than capital punishment. This type of punishment is strong enough to make scare in criminals' minds.

Furthermore, most criminals have committed crimes when they cannot control themselves or they cannot think about the consequences of their own actions. In fact, many people have committed crimes when they are angry. For example, I read a story about a woman who killed her children by herself. She did love her children, however her husband left her and lived with other woman and did not care of his wife and children. She though that she would kill herself, she wondered that who would look after her children when she was away, and she decided to dump down river with her children. Unfortunately, she was saved, while her children died by herself. It will be inhumane if government uses death penalty for her.

However, other people believe that using capital punishment ensures safety for societies. In fact, we can see that the number of crimes is rising in some countries although many criminals are punished by death penalty and this kind of punishment cannot stop crimes.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that death penalty cannot bring safety for societies like people want. This punishment is not only an inhumane one, but also cannot prevent committing of criminals. Life time imprisonment is a better alternative for capital punishment.

EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Oct 19, 2009   #2
In the 18 century BC, death penalty was used at first time,

It probably goes back much farther even than that.

Until now, this kind of punishment is still used in most of countries in the world.

"Until now" and "still" don't work together.

People are born by God, and God is only person who has this right.

Avoid this. It is an unconvincing argument, as it can never mean anything to anyone who is not religious. Also, any person whose religion includes the Old Testament as a holy text will find plenty of permission from God to put people to death at the slightest provocation.

It will be inhumane if government uses death penalty for her.

Why? You assert this. You don't prove it.

In fact, we can see that the number of crimes is rising in some countries although many criminals are punished by death penalty and this kind of punishment cannot stop crimes.

Again, it would be nice if provided some actual facts to back up this assertion.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Oct 20, 2009   #3
Still need more depth to your arguments.

First of all, it is really inhumane when human beings kill human beings.

Why?

The person who deserves to be taken into prison is her husband a bad father as well as husband; it himself made her kill her children.

Why didn't she put them up for adoption? Or ask a friend to look after them? Also, wouldn't this woman be able to mount an insanity defense? That is, this isn't the sort of case that would normally provoke the death penalty anyway.

Vietnam, for an example. According to the report of states, in 2008, the murder rate rose 12.4%; it showed that death penalty could not stop crimes.

Some more analysis is required here. Also, what is the recidivism rate among prisoners who are executed for their crimes?
OP thinhtvdhtm 41 / 97  
Oct 21, 2009   #4
good morning EF_Sean
i think when a person kill another, it is inhumane.

Why didn't she put them up for adoption? Or ask a friend to look after them? Also, wouldn't this woman be able to mount an insanity defense? That is, this isn't the sort of case that would normally provoke the death penalty anyway.

because, she decided to do that when she was in bad condition, she could make any conscious decision as well as the consequence of her decision.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Oct 22, 2009   #5
i think when a person kill another, it is inhumane.

Yes, I gathered that. But you have to explain why one should hold that view if you want your essay to be effective.


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