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when and where would you like to go back in the past and why?


vaishali1980 26 / 83  
Jul 23, 2010   #1
If you could go back to some time and place in the past, when and where would you go? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

This is really interesting and turning on my past memory. I know that my past time is not good as present. I suffered a very hard time because of mistake made by me and my family.

If I get chance I would like to go back to my higher secondary school. That period was dreaming and dealing with goal of own life as well as most important educational year.

My further study depends on I achived mark or grade in higher secondary school. This period plays important role to give direction of future. There are many reasons to go to back to higher secondary school .

The main reason is to correct my mistake. In my school life I had a dream that I will be independent person. I wanted to complete my parents dream which they have seen for me.

My family was very rich and engaged in many legal battle against the relatives, friends and government. Though we had sufficient agriculture land and income from those, that money goes to lawyer and other expenditure. I wanted to become a lawyer or police inspector or engineer which I can help to resolve our problem. Instead of doing handwork, I was always in dreaming and like to sleep too much. I never thought that I wasted my time in sleep and other unnecessary things. As a result I didn't get good marks and didn't get admission in engineering college. Now I have everything. I have money, peace and loving husband but still something is missing. I tryed to find that reason which indicate me that I am not able to help my parents and I didn't complete their dreams. If I get chance to go back to school, I will study hard and try to fulfill their dream.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jul 26, 2010   #2
This is really an interesting and turning on my past memory from my past. I know that my past time is not as important as the present.

That period was full of dreaming and dealing with goals of own life as well as my most important educational year.

My further study depended on my mark or grade in higher secondary school. This period played an important role in establishing my direction in life. of future.

I tried to find that reason why I was not able to help my parents and I had not fulfilled their dreams. If I get chance to go ...

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If I could, I would...
In conclusion, If I could go back in the past I will would choose go back in my school to use my knowledge, which I learned from my mistake. As well as Also, I want to accomplish my parents goals for me and fulfill my dreams.

:-) I like this essay!
OP vaishali1980 26 / 83  
Jul 29, 2010   #3
Thanks Kelvin and Yayz

I have post essay here again after correction

This is really an interesting memory from my past. I know that my past does not compare to the good quality of my present. I suffered a very hard time because mistake made by me and my family. If I get chance I would like to go back to my higher secondary school. That period was full of dreaming and dealing with goals of own life as well as most important educational year.

My further study depends on my grade in higher secondary school. Thus this period played an important part in determining my future. There are many reasons going back to higher secondary school .

The main reason for going back would be to correct my mistake. During my time in school, I had a dream that I would be an independent person. I wanted to complete my parents' dream which they have seen for me.

My family was very rich and engaged in many legal battle against the relatives, friends and the government. Though we had land for agriculture and sufficient income from that, that money went to pay lawyer fee and other expenditure.

I wanted to become a lawyer , police inspector or engineer which I can help to resolve our problem. Instead of doing hard work, I was always dreaming and sleeping too much. I never realize `that I was wasting my time in sleeping and doing other unnecessary things.

As a result, I didn't get good grade and didn't get admission in engineering college. Now I have everything: money, peace and loving husband but still something is missing. I tried to find that reason which pointing towards the I am helpless to help my parents and couldn't complete their dreams. If I get chance to go back to school, I will study hard and try to fulfill their dream.

The second reason is to enjoy college life. When I look back, I feel that I have never enjoyed it. I always in stressful situations. All of my friends liked to go to on trips to visit historical places, movies and drama but I preferred to go home and rest. I was feeling uncomfortable with them. It caused everyone to ignore me and had never consider my opinion. Now I want to go to back to school and take a part in each and every event of my school and college days.

I got prizes in chess and some sports but I didn't concentrate on those. If I get a chance I will show my skill in those areas.

In conclusion, If I could go back in the past, I would choose to go back to my school use my knowledge, which I have learned from my mistake. Also I want to accomplish my parents goals for me and fulfill my dreams.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jul 30, 2010   #4
This is what I would do:
That period was full of dreaming and dealing with goals of own life as well as dreams and envisioned goals -- my most important educational year.

I am impressed with your progress!

In conclusion, If if I could go back in to the past, I would choose to go back...


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