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I like to cook myself - homemade food are healthy, low cost, and it's just my hobby!


ladansh 1 / -  
Apr 8, 2015   #1
Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Food is an important part of life. All humans need to food for living. I prefer to prepare and eat food at home for three reasons. It is healthy, low cost, and hobby.

First, homemade foods are more healthy that restaurants. We pay attention more to vitamins and minerals foods. For example my younger sister tries to get diet. My parents buy foods that have low calories healthy for her.

Second, homemade foods are low cost. When we prepare a food at home, it has cheaper materials, and we do not have to pay for tip or parking. For example my friend and I went to a chic restaurant for brunch last week at Georgetown DC. We paid $25 for 2 hours parked there.

Last, it is hobby for me that cook new foods. I always watch food channel on television, and l like to cook them myself.
In conclusion, homemade food are healthy, low cost, and hobby.
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Firda Umairoh 6 / 5 2  
Apr 9, 2015   #2
Hallo, Ladansh. Your writing essay is good, but i think it is too general. I'll recommend you to write this:

Food is an important part of life. All humans need to food for living. I prefer to prepare and eat food at home for three reasons. It is healthy, low cost, and hobby.

-- The introduction is too short. You need to state your thesis statement, which is important to guide you to the body paragraphs. Try this:

Modern lifestyle has brought a significant influence of people's diet these days. People are too busy to prepare their own food. As such, they are more likely to eat at restaurants or food stalls since it is fast served and delicious tasted. However, I would claim that it is essential for people to cook food at home due to it is healthier, cheaper, and part of hobby.

This could be your first body paragraph:

It is true that eating in a restaurant or food stalls do not require people to spend much time and effort. Many workers prefer to have lunch at canteen or other food stalls rather than bring a lunch box from home because they do not need to wake up earlier for cooking and it is more simple. Besides, people can choose variety menus, which are served in a couple of minutes. It is thus clear that people can save more time and energy when they eat in food stalls or restaurants.

Second body paragraph:

In addition, by having food in restaurant, people could not denied that the cuisines are tasted better. Mostly well-known restaurants have professional chefs, whose skills have been already tested. They have a unique style of cooking, which can produce an unforgettable taste of food and make their customer being addictive. It is imperative that people prefer to eat in a restaurant due to the delicious taste.

Third body paragraph:

However, it is inevitable that there are several benefits that people get by preparing their own food. Firstly, home-made food is healthier. People will know that the ingredients are well-washed before being cooked. They also can choose healthy food that highly nutrition and rich vitamins. Secondly, cooking food at home is low budget because the ingredients can be purchased cheaper in groceries or traditional markets. For example, usually the price for one dish in a restaurant is equal with three dishes home-made cooking as the dish includes the tax. Thirdly, cooking can be a hobby that can help people to release stress. An online survey held by Living Social revealed that 23% of respondents choose cooking as their way for escaping stress. All of this point out is that cooking their own food has brought them a lot of advantages.

You should put your final conclusion at the end of your essay. This could be an example:

To sum up, it seems to me that although having meals in a restaurant or food stands could save time and effort for people, particularly busy workers, I strongly believe that preparing food at home is much better for people's health. Where possible, an awareness of healthy lifestyle should be put more attention by people.

Good luck ;)


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