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IELTS TASK 1 (Line Chart) - Goods Transported by Four Modes of Transport.


JasS 10 / 30  
Mar 20, 2014   #1
The chart compare the proportion of products carried through four various kind of transportation system in the UK during a period of 28 years, from 1974 to 2002.

It is clear that the road was the most common way of transporting goods, while the least popular mode of transport was pipeline in each year.

In 1974, the quantities of goods which transported by road was approximately 70 million tones. This figure had been fluctuated by 1995, then, enjoyed a dramatic increase up to just under 100 million tones. However, there was a slight climb in the way of pipeline from around 5 million tones to just over 20 million tones, during this period.

By contrast, from 1974 to 1978, transferring goods by water and railway stabilized at about 40 million tones. Nonetheless, the former enjoyed a sharp jump to less than 60 million in 1978, then, saw a slight decrease and reached a peak of more than 65 million. Comparing to the letter had dipped at around 25 million tones, before remained stable at 40 million in 2002.




Bob brother 15 / 23  
Mar 20, 2014   #2
The chart compare the chart compares
four various kind of transportation system four various kind of transportation systems.
during a period of 28 years during a 20 year period
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,197 459  
Mar 20, 2014   #3
You write well. However, you should pay particular attention to word choice, which can switch the focus away from the data given.

stabilized at about

The two words 'stabilized' and 'enjoyed' are not appropriate here. The first word collocates with economy/ rate, and the latter mainly explains a particular situation from which people get pleasure/happy.

during a period of 28 years

Over a 28-year period
During means 'for part of the time mentioned'. This can be followed by a word or phrase representing a period of time.
Over is 'for the whole time mentioned'. This is the general guideline: Over + a number of months of years + period.

Hope this helps :)
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Mar 20, 2014   #4
the quantities of goods which were transported by roads

had been fluctuated

, during this period

The comma here could be omitted.

, then, saw a slight decrease and reached a peak of more than 65 million

After a slight increase in 1998, it reached a peak of more than 65 million in 2002.

Comparing to

Compared to/In comparison with

Comparing to the letter had dipped at around 25 million tones, before remained stable at 40 million in 2002.

This sentence lacks a subject.
Meanwhile, the latter experienced a decade of fluctuation prior to finishing the period at 40 million.


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