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The Line Chart : The number of University Alumni in Canada for 15-year Period


mem77 62 / 98 6  
Nov 10, 2016   #1
The line graph reveals the information about the number of college alumni in Canada for fifteen-year period. Overall, despite having an upward trend, women showed a higher proportion than men and it's led them to be the highest one over the period.

According to the chart, in 1992 more females were graduated in Canada with around 90,000 and men showed just around 70,000. This led to a widened gap between them. Moreover, the proportion both of them increased slightly between 1993 and 1995 at around 100,000 for females and almost 80,000 for males. However, between 1996 and 1998 the number of graduated in Canada decreased gradually at 100,000 for women and around 70,000 for men.

A more detailed look at the graph showed that, between 1999 and 2001 while female's alumni showed a positive trend, male's alumni witnessed a fluctuate trend. Furthermore, both of figures showed a dramatically increased in the proportion of university alumni during 2002 to 2007. Thus, graduate numbers reached their highest levels in 2007 with female's proportion more than male's proportion.




ryan31 65 / 96 15  
Nov 10, 2016   #2
hai edho
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