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Ielts 1: The line chart presents the figures for UK commuters who owned one or more cars (1975-2005)


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Nov 3, 2021   #1

car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005



The line gragh shows the figures for the number of UK commuters who own one or more cars over the period of 30 years.
It is clear that the owner of one car made up the greatest level, whereas the number of people who got for their own three cars comprised a negligible point over the period shown.

In the year 1975, about 43 percent of people in the UK did not own any car, at the same percentage was the number of one - car owner with 45 percent. Also in that year, the percentage of people who had two cars and three cars was quite small, 7 percent and 3 percent respectively. However, the year 1985 saw a drammatical decline in the firgure for people who had no car or one car only. In contrast, the one who got two cars or three cars rose slightly in the number.

From 1985 to 2005, there was a gradual fall in the percentage of commuters who did not buy themselves a car to 22 percent, while the percentage people own one car increased again to 45 percent. This period also witnessed a moderate growth in the number of UK owner of two cars and three cars.
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Nov 4, 2021   #2
over the period of 30 years.

Seeing as how this is the summary overviews you cannot use other year measurement references yet. If you mustuse other year measurements, never forget to indicate the actual years covered otherwise, the summary is incomplete in terms of accurate data presentation and could recieve a reduced sectional score.

the owner of one car

The phrase is inaccurate in the sense that it is in singular form when the image provides a plural measurement for "single car owners". This is a sentence formation problem.

there was a gradual fall in the percentage

You have to present the starting percentage to help the reader understand the fall rate and final figure.

witnessed a moderate growth

Of what percentage?

Basically, the writer needs to work on accurate data presentation in relation to report clarity. There are also several spelling evors that show a lack of editing and proofreading.The essay will fail based an LR and GRA errors.


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