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Task 1 : Line graph essay of expenditure on phone services in America


tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
May 26, 2014   #1
The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.
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The line graph illustrates the average yearly the costumer spending by American on mobile and landline phone services over the 10-year period.

It is clear that spending on landline services have a dramatic decline, while on mobile services increase slightly at a decade. However, both of services broke at the same record in 2006.

In 2001, on mobile phone services began by merely $200, while the greatest amount of annual expenditure was reached by the residential phone services around $700. Over the following 5 years, on cell phone services steadily dropped at just over $600, whereas on landline phone services were the reserve figure.

A closer look at the data reveals that on both types of phone service had paid out the same amount of money spending just over $500 by Americans in 2006. Exceeding, on mobile phone services rose by approximately $750 in 2010, but an average on residential phone services recorded a significant fall which was just over half this amount.




OP tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
May 28, 2014   #2
(at the end of the introduction you need to add a general trend)

As long as i learn IELTS, the trend will be explained in overview paragraph and the introduction paragraph is paraphrasing of prompt. But thanks you for this advice.
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
May 28, 2014   #3
As long as i learn IELTS, the trend will be explained in overview paragraph and the introduction paragraph is paraphrasing of prompt.

up to you, but a one-row paragraph is a bit weird. by the way, what I suggested is what many academic writing books suggest. Anyway, you are free to choose what structure is more appropriate, but believe me i'm an experienced person in academic writing.

Good luck
Ahmad
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
May 30, 2014   #4
The line graph illustrates the average yearly thecostumercustomer spending by American on mobile and landline phone services over the 10-year period.

.... "average yearly the consumer pending"? This phrase spoils your intro.... Also, mention the period in more details (for e.g. 2001- 2010 instead of 10 years) Be very clear and concise when you respond to this task;

The line graph illustrates the details of average annual spending on mobile and land line telephone services by US citizens during 2001 to 2010.
It is clear that spending on landline services have a dramatic decline, while it had a major increase on mobile services increaseslightlyat aduring the decade.

It is not a slight increase, but a major one :)


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