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The line graph illustrates the number of tourists travelling to an Caribbean island (2010 to 2017)


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Nov 9, 2021   #1

visitors going a Caribbean island



The line graph illustrates the number of tourists travelling to a Caribbean island during the period from 2010 to 2017. Overall, despite the fluctuation in the quantity of visitors staying on cruise and those staying on island, the total visitors consistently increased for seven years.

From 2010 to 2012, the total visitors rose from 1 million to 1.5 million. During the period from 2010 to 2012, the quantity of visitors staying on the island remained stable 0.75 million at the first year before growing sharply at 1.25 in 2012, while the number of visitors staying on cruise ships only increased slightly at 0.5 million in 2011 and then decreased dramatically at 0.25 million in 2012.

Throughout the period from 2012 to 2016, the total visitors increased considerably from 1.5 million to 2.75 million. Visitors staying on the island increased and stabilized at 1.5 million from 2013 to 2015 before showing a downward trend in 2016 which was at 1.25. In comparison, the quantity of visitors staying on cruise ships showed an upward trend from 0.25 million in 2012 to 1.5 million in 2016.

From 2016 to 2017, the number of visitors staying on cruise ships climbed substantially to 2 million and higher than those staying on island although there was a slight increase of tourists on island making up from 1.25 million to 1.5 million.
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Nov 10, 2021   #2
The essay is over-analyzed at 127 words. With a writing time allowance of 20 minutes, this should have no more than 200 words in it. Actually, 175 words would be the mostideal presentation. The writer created a highly verbose essay that tends to over-extend what should be simple data and analysis statements. Since an image was not provided, I find it difficult to spot the areas for correction, improvement, reduction, or deletion. Reading this report though, it feels like the presentation should only have 3 paragraphs in it. The 4 paragraph presentation is a real stretch. Being q reporting essay, the writer should have been able to create the report clearly with lesser word usage.


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